Talk:Eritrean–Ethiopian War/GA1
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Reviewer: Delldot (talk · contribs) 06:28, 16 December 2012 (UTC)
Unfortunately, the article as it is at the moment is going to fail this nomination. My primary concerns are that it is not comprehensive enough or written well enough. That is not to say that either of these issues are horrible, I just don't feel that they're meeting GA standards at this time. The article could certainly be brought up to GA standards with some work. From a look at the history the article is not being worked on actively, the GA nominator only made a couple edits adding references already there. I have left some suggestions for improvement on the talk page the other day, anyone is welcome to use them at any time if they are found useful.
The article is fairly well referenced although there are many unsourced facts as well. Sources should be added for those.
My concern with the writing style is that in some places the article is poorly organized and difficult to read. For example, the Aftermath section deals with the close of the war, and death toll, people displaced, etc. comes before this section. The section doesn't proceed completely chronologically either. In some cases, sentences are too long or wordy. I made some copy edits to the article when I was reading over it the other day but I think it needs a more comprehensive copy edit.
With comprehensiveness, my concerns are that some of the aspects are not covered in very much depth. e.g. there's one sentence about demographics of one army, how about more info on the armies' demographics? How about some followup with what happened to refugees and people not displaced in the Aftermath section? I made other suggestions the other day on the talk page. Some concepts are not fleshed out, e.g. as I mentioned "human waves" and "bogged down in Mogadishu". The Continuing conflicts section should summarize the 2010 Eritrea–Ethiopia border skirmish per WP:SUM.
The lack of the map image I requested is not a deal breaker but I think it would be really crucial for understanding the conflicts, where they took place, how far apart they were, much of Eritrea the Ethiopian army ended up occupying at the end of the conflict, etc.
[Edit]: One more thing I forgot to mention, I think the lead should be expanded to summarize the article more fully per WP:LEAD.
Again, I think this is a good start, just not ready for GA status at this time. Definitely let me know if you're interested in more suggestions or help in improving the article, or if you have anything to discuss. delldot ∇. 06:28, 16 December 2012 (UTC)