Talk:Erigone atra

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Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment

This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 15 September 2020 and 17 December 2020. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Dgoldblum.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 20:51, 17 January 2022 (UTC)

Student Edit

Hi there! Overall, your article was very informative and had all the correct citations/sources in the correct places. I did fix up some small typos and spelling mistakes you had.

Besides these, your article had all the information and details there, but your sentence structure is a little choppy, especially in the Description sections. The writing doesn’t flow as well as it could because it reads more like a list of facts that needs to be put together in a more logical order. I also thought you could explain some parts more. For example, what is overwintering and why does it occur?

I would also say that you should put zeros before your decimals. For example, even though they mean the same thing, “0.7” is a little easier to read than “.7”

Finally, when referencing studies or other research, I don’t think you need to include the name of the researchers.

Overall, nice work! Great article.

Sandeep525 (talk)

Behavioral ecology student edit

Your article is very informative and well-cited. I went through and read with a focus on grammar and sentence structure. I found some issues, including with distinctions between "then" and "than", run-on sentences, and lack of use of apostrophes when referring an action or quality to an individual. I cleared up these issues, and overall I think this article taught me a lot about the species. SlyFox52 (talk) 19:12, 3 December 2020 (UTC)

Student Peer Edit

I really liked your article. It was very easy to read and abstract information from. I made a few edits to make it even better: I added one new image. I put it next to the habitat section as I thought it was a good picture displaying the spider in its habitat. I also added some more links (cephalothorax, abdomen, habitat, etc.) and corrected a couple minor grammatical and punctuation errors. I also moved the Webs header lower in the page because I thought reproduction and lifespan should come first because it provides more behaviorally relevant information. I also inserted a “Behavior” heading and put “Ballooning” under it as a sub-header. Keremyucebas (talk) 02:08, 4 December 2020 (UTC)

Student Peer Edit

Hi, great post! I felt like there wasn’t much to change, but I looked over your post and made sure that it made sense and it was clear of grammar/syntax mistakes! It was quite well written and composed, so I thought to just add more information about your spider. I just added details that I found in a journal article that you did not use yet, and I added to the sections lifespan, reproduction, ballooning, and rappelling. Wikispiders11 (talk) 03:51, 7 December 2020 (UTC)