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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 08:48, 26 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]


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  • Replace "It is likely that the character was inspired by legends of Thessalian witches that had developed during the period of Classical Greece" with "It is likely that the character was inspired by the legends of Thessalian witches developed during Classical Greece period".
    I changed it just slightly, but used your suggestion as the basis.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 20:38, 30 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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  • Close the quote "not so abominable as the wretched poets [i.e. Lucan and Ovid] painted me." - you forgot the last quotation. And maybe rethink the use of the brackets and replace with parenthesizes?
    I added the quote. Isn't the use of brackets the most commonly used technique for inserting additional information into a sentence?--Gen. Quon (Talk) 20:38, 30 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
    I guess it doesn't really matter. Carbrera (talk) 22:58, 30 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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The entire article could use some work re-wording. It tries to keep too formal and due to that, sounds fairly awkward at certain points. Anyway, on hold for seven days to allow for these changes. Good luck and thanks, @PING me when you're done. Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 02:35, 29 June 2016 (UTC).[reply]

I'll comb over it in the next few days and try to fix awkward spots.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 20:39, 30 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@Carbrera: would these changes be acceptable?--Gen. Quon (Talk) 22:10, 6 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@Carbrera:.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:43, 11 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]