Talk:Entertainment (band)
Just started this page... I still need band picture and all the Wiki on Gender. I'm digging through interviews for more band info. This band is also known as "Entertainme-nt" and "Entertainme.nt" -- How do you redirect all search queries to this article? --Maninthewomb (talk) 05:15, 15 January 2010 (UTC)
Thanks for all the added info, Todd. I did the best I could with what I knew---I remembered there was another member after Andrew but before Chisolm but couldn't find any references to your name. I wanted to note on one edit I am just making.....on Wikipedia, "Associated acts" doesn't mean influences or bands that sound similar, but rather, bands that are connected via shared members, side projects, later projects, etc. So Feeding Fingers should be there but the other ones you added shouldn't be. Thanks again... Greg Fasolino (talk) 02:13, 25 May 2010 (UTC)
Thanks Greg for helping me "keep the ship straight." As a devoted Ent. fan, I am very proud of these boys so I want everything to be as historically accurate as possible! BTW, who is Todd? Cheers! —Preceding unsigned comment added by Terminusmuzak (talk • contribs) 19:12, 4 June 2010 (UTC)
Sorry Terminus, not sure why I called you Todd, haha.
I am likewise a longtime fan (was friends with Andrew Gleason who introduced me to Ent. in 2002, then my band played with them many times since then). I am glad to help here as well. However, I am somewhat perplexed by some of the changes you made, as in some cases, I fixed grammatical errors or sentences/phrasing that was awkward (I have a journalism degree and have worked as a writer, copy-editor, and proofreader for decades now), and you changed them back so now they sound kind of awkward again. Any reason why? In particular, this sentence as it stands makes no sense: even the idea of "...hard to please concertgoers folding their arms to the idea of being entertained." I'm not sure what you are trying to convey there, but it's a very unclear and awkward sentence and needs to be reworked. "...hard to please concertgoers folding their arms to the idea of being entertained" is a mental image, not an idea. Also, I had fixed this mistake which you changed back: You cannot say "was soon released the following year", it's simply not correct. "Soon" cannot be "the following year." That's why I had changed "soon" to "then" and will fix it again. cheers Greg Fasolino (talk) 06:34, 7 June 2010 (UTC) P.S. A band's Biography is the same thing as their History, having a separate section is redundant. Greg Fasolino (talk) 06:40, 7 June 2010 (UTC)
Greg- Thanks for that, and thanks for correcting my grammatical flaws as well; I never claimed to be a journalist, just someone who has followed the band for a while, so thanks for your help. That "concert-goers" phrase comes from something I read a while back from the band in an Atlanta publication. If I can find for you, I will send as reference. Also, the initial release of Gender line is missing from the copy (might be due to the footnote references?) And lastly, Mr. Thimpson had only played with the band for a couple of years, so "several" may be a stretch. Again, thanks for your help with this!
No prob. I changed "several" to "a couple" and fixed the footnote issue. Greg Fasolino (talk) 16:52, 8 June 2010 (UTC)