Talk:Enrico Alfano/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 16:03, 10 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I'll give reviewing this one a shot, since it's been sitting for six months waiting for a review. Wizardman 16:03, 10 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Here's what I found:

Early on in the article, the article gets a bit heavy on the Camorra jargon. It's not overboard, but if there was a way to fine-tune that a bit more than it would be helpful.
First sentence in the Camorra section feels a little overdone with the commas.
Later on in the article the prose starts to veer away from encyclopedic in nature a little bit.

Anything else I just fixed myself. Reading it through in all, though, I wouldn't consider the issues to be deal breakers in terms of the article being a good article, so I'll pass the article as it is. That being said, hopefully the prose will be a bit fine-tuned just to make it flow a little better for lay readers. Wizardman 02:02, 11 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]