Talk:Enjoy Yourself (Pop Smoke song)/GA2

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:35, 28 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

During this review, I'll check the previous one to ensure no concerns from that are still in existence. --K. Peake 08:35, 28 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

Infobox looks good!
The release info should be after the writing sentence

Not done I think the release info should be put first.

The Ultimate Boss This is not the order that it is supposed to be followed in the lead, as the song was obviously written before its release. Also, I did make a typo with the Kenny G part like you pointed out. --K. Peake 07:58, 1 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"as the second single on" → "as the second single from the album on" with the pipe
"featuring Burna Boy was" → "featuring Burna Boy in place of Kenny G was" because otherwise the reader is unsure if both were featured

Don't you mean Karol G?

"was written by Pop Smoke and Karol G," → "was written by the performers alongside"
"it features flickers of Spanish guitar" → "the song features Spanish guitar" since "it" should not be used in the para's opening sentence
Pipe sample to Sampling (music)
Remove Moroccan-American rapper introduction to French Montana, as that being in the body is enough, plus remove the wikilink on him at this point

Not done it's important to introduce who the people are, even in the lead.

Pipe music critics to Music journalism

Background

Retitle to Background and recording
"and used his one of his beats" → "and used one of his beats"
"to reach international territories, he" → "to chart in international territories, Pop Smoke"
"of another song Pop Smoke, "Get Right"," → "of fellow Pop Smoke song "Get Right","
Introduce Tyga as being a fellow rapper
"Tyga shared attached screenshots of" → "Tyga shared screenshots of" per the previous review
"from February 2020 showing" → "from February 2020, showing"
"when Karol G replaced" → "with Karol G replacing"

Music and writing

[8][6] should be put in numerical order
Pipe sample to Sampling (music)
"wrote the song pays" → "wrote that the song pays"
"wrote the song is" → "observed that the song is"
"under their legal names of" → "under their respective legal names of"
"It was also written alongside" → "They co-wrote it with"
I am confused about the above sentence; why have you referred to Rico Love and French Montana by their real names in the list of writers but not the other two until the end of the sentence? You could maybe add the real names mid-sentence for these tow; also, remove the pipe on Karim Kharbouch.

Release and reception

Pipe single to Single (music)
Are you sure Spotify is an appropriate source for the single release date?

Spotify is the biggest streaming service right now. It is reliable to use as a source.

"from Pop Smoke's posthumous debut studio album Shoot for the Stars, Aim for the Moon" → "from the album"
"was later added as the 12th track" →"was later included as the 12th track on Pop Smoke's posthumous debut studio album Shoot for the Stars, Aim for the Moon"
Remove wikilink on Burna Boy
"An EP for "Enjoy Yourself" of the same name" → "An EP for "Enjoy Yourself""
"The EP also featured" → "The EP also features"
"Pop Smoke's vocals to" → "Pop Smoke's vocals on "Enjoy Yourself" to"
[24] and [25] should be swapped for correct order with the listing of the chart positions

Track listings

Retitle to Track listing
Remove the remix, as that is part of the album track list
Wikilink Karol G

Credits and personnel

Pipe Karim Kharbouch to French Montana
Why is Rico Love's production not credited and why is he listed under his real name?

Rico Love did not produce the track though...

Charts

Good

References

Copyvio score looks great at 21.9%!!
Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
Cite Complex as work/website instead for ref 1
Wikilink The Independent on ref 7
Shouldn't Victor Victor Worldwide also be included for ref 9?

The media notes only include Republic

Pipe Tidal to Tidal (service) on ref 18 for consistency

Final comments and verdict

On hold until all of the issues are fixed, but feel free to reach out if you are confused! --K. Peake 10:43, 28 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Kyle Peake Thanks for the review. I have addressed all of your concerns. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 07:20, 1 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Kyle Peake done. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 08:43, 1 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

The Ultimate Boss ✓ Pass now; there were a few errors but these were not points you completely missed so I fixed them. --K. Peake 09:33, 1 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]