Talk:English invasion of Scotland (1400)/GA2
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I am giving this an article a Review for possible Good Article status.
Reviewer: Shearonink (talk · contribs) 04:01, 12 January 2017 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
Passes the threshold "immediate failure" criteria: No cleanup banners, no obvious copyright infringements, etc Shearonink (talk) 04:12, 12 January 2017 (UTC)
- Is it well written?
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- Just a few issues, these are listed below. Shearonink (talk) 18:18, 12 January 2017 (UTC)
- One last thing, then it should be good to go. Shearonink (talk) 16:41, 13 January 2017 (UTC)
- Just a few issues, these are listed below. Shearonink (talk) 18:18, 12 January 2017 (UTC)
- B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- Is it verifiable with no original research?
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:
- The three oxford dnb refs are behind a paywall, they require a subscription. The refs need to say so. If you need some helps on this take a look at Template:Subscription required.
- The easiest way is to put {{subscription required}} at the end of the reference as in <ref>{{cite info etc.}} {{subscription required}}</ref> . Shearonink (talk) 18:18, 12 January 2017 (UTC)
- The three oxford dnb refs are behind a paywall, they require a subscription. The refs need to say so. If you need some helps on this take a look at Template:Subscription required.
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- Thaks for the walk through- Done O Fortuna!...Imperatrix mundi. 13:07, 13 January 2017 (UTC)
- No problem, glad my explanation made sense. Shearonink (talk) 16:41, 13 January 2017 (UTC)
- C. It contains no original research:
- Well-researched, nicely-done. Shearonink (talk) 18:18, 12 January 2017 (UTC)
- D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
- Ran the copyvio tool and found no issues. Shearonink (talk) 18:18, 12 January 2017 (UTC)
- C. It contains no original research:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
- I especially like how the article puts all the principal players in context - all the infighting is mentioned - deposed a cousin, nobles fighting for control, etc. Shearonink (talk) 18:18, 12 January 2017 (UTC)
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- Is it neutral?
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- Is it stable?
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- Images are all relevant. I also think that when images of the people are used in the historical articles, it humanizes the subject for our general readership. Shearonink (talk) 18:18, 12 January 2017 (UTC)
- B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
- Status on hold pending the various issues below and some more read-throughs. Shearonink (talk) 18:18, 12 January 2017 (UTC)
- Did another read-through, have one last question, please see below "Readthrough - found an issue". After this is discussed/attended to, I will be ready to finish up the Review. Shearonink (talk) 16:41, 13 January 2017 (UTC)
- Pass or Fail:
I am listing these issues separately below, for visual clarity - not because they are awful or more important, but because it will be easier to keep track of as they get attended-to. Shearonink (talk) 18:18, 12 January 2017 (UTC)
Lead
[edit]Not only was no pitched battle was ever attempted, -> The grammar of this sentence needs to be fixed (two was'es...)
Background
[edit]to thesitting parliament in November 1399. -> spacing but one of Scotland's own greatest military commanders ->This is a little hard to understand, the wording needs to be adjusted.
Aftermath
[edit]Likewise, the Scotichronicon suggesting that 'nothing worthy of remembrance was done' by their enemies. -> is this verb tense what you wanted it to be? Seems like it should be "suggested" instead of "suggesting".
- And Done these three, too. Restructured the last one. O Fortuna!...Imperatrix mundi. 13:17, 13 January 2017 (UTC)
- Forgot to ping Shearonink. O Fortuna!...Imperatrix mundi. 13:18, 13 January 2017 (UTC)
Readthrough - found an issue
[edit]@Fortuna Imperatrix Mundi: Did another read-through and came upon a phrase/word-choice that I think needs to be adjusted... "came directly from the royal [[Household]]" which renders as "came directly from the royal Household".
There are a couple of possible issues here:
- Did you mean to only link the word Household?
- Is it proper for the one word to be capitalized (Household) and not the other? Should it be Royal Household or royal household?
I think it should probably not link to the generic household (which is to the definition of the term that applies to anyone and everyone) but instead link to the more specific understanding of the unit of the English government of that era [[Royal Households of the United Kingdom#Historical overview|Royal Household]] which will then be rendered as Royal Household but am willing to discuss etc. It does seem to me that, since the term is referring to a unit of government with a specific form and function - like a Member of Parliament or White House Staff and so on - that both words should be capitalized, but let's work that through. Shearonink (talk) 16:41, 13 January 2017 (UTC)
- Well spotted Shearonink. I agree on both your points- This suggests that RH is capitalised is the sources, and yes, as you say, it is a unit of government rather than my mum's kitchen :) cheers! Doing that now. O Fortuna!...Imperatrix mundi. 12:34, 14 January 2017 (UTC)
Done O Fortuna!...Imperatrix mundi. 12:48, 14 January 2017 (UTC)
Future edits
[edit]Going forward (and if the writer-editor is considering FA) I think some of the wording and phrasing in the article could perhaps be reworked to read more smoothly. For instance:
- "Dunbar was not only an example of the divisions within the Scottish nobility, but one of Scotland's own greatest military commanders." the phrase "one of Scotland's own greater military commanders" seems to have one too many adjectives describing the word "commanders" (which itself modifies the word "one"). Perhaps something along the lines of "Dunbar was not only an example of the divisions within the Scottish nobility itself[which is already stating that he is Scottish and therefore already "one of Scotland's own"] but also one of that country's greatest military commanders".
- "...the Scots, elements among the English nobility were not averse to a pre-emptive strike, either." [in my opinion, that comma at the end is unneeded].
These are simply issues to keep in mind for future editing & possible improvements. Shearonink (talk) 20:10, 14 January 2017 (UTC)