Talk:Elvis Schoenberg's Orchestre Surreal

Overhaul

I've completed a substantial copy-edit of this article in order to address profound issues with tone and readability. A source was removed as a result:

Elvis Schoenberg's Orchestre Surreal is a "twenty-five-piece group of daring top Los Angeles studio musicians, that fuse classical, jazz, rock hip hop, world music and just about anything else," founded in 1997.

This appears to be a promotional statement from a representative of the band. I could put up a blog saying I'm the most intelligent man in the world, and then cite it in a Wikipedia article saying "Skeletor3000 is 'the most intelligent man in the world'" and it would be equally valid.

I also removed an uncited review of the group that I could not find on Google, as well as many instances of peacocking and flowery uncited claims. I believe the article is cleaned up enough at this point to remove the peacock template, but I'm adding a refimprove template since there are still several remaining uncited claims.

The article's structure and style was also inconsistent and jumbled. I've sorted it into a few subheadings and reworked the section about the group's structure. It may be better suited as a list, but I think I've made a substantial improvement to its state.

Thanks Skeletor3000 (talk) 19:18, 21 November 2019 (UTC)

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