Talk:Ellen Pompeo/GA1

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 18:35, 4 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Grabbing this for a review. Aoba47 (talk) 18:35, 4 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Comments (Round 1)

Please add an ALT description for the infobox image. I would also specify in the caption for the infobox image to say where the image was taken (i.e. the event).
In the first paragraph of the lead, I would specify for the part “then appeared in other television shows” to “guest-starred in other television shows” to make it clear that these were rather small or minor parts in comparison to those shows as a whole.
I would rephrase “hit series” as the term “hit” is rather informal for Wikipedia.
I would use Pompeo’s full name in the first instance in the “Early life” section (i.e. like the Jennifer Lawrence article).
I would link née in the same section.
If possible, I would see if you could find out how Pompeo’s father died.

No info available.

Just a clarification question, but why did she have those childhood nicknames? Where did they come from?

Same

The first paragraph for the “Debut and further roles” subsection is lacking a lot of citations so make sure to go back into this and add citations for the film appearances as her television appearances.
Link Thalía in the same paragraph.
Please add an ALT description for the image in the main body of the article and add the year in which the image was taken.
I would switch around the last two sentence from the first paragraph of the “Grey's Anatomy and other works” subsection to make it flow more chronologically.
I am uncertain about breaking apart the accolades Pompeo received from Grey’s Anatomy into smaller paragraphs (i.e. two sentences). I would suggest looking through this section again to see if there is a way to reorganize these paragraphs to make everything flow better as the shorter paragraphs make things choppy and more difficult to follow, especially for those unfamiliar with the actress and/or her material. I want to leave this part up to you as you have done an excellent job with the article so far, but I think it just needs a little more restructuring.
I would also see if there would be a way to better integrate the quote about Pompeo saying she will stop acting after Grey’s Anatomy with her activity as a producer. I would also include information about how she directed an episode of Grey’s Anatomy. This would be helpful for including more of a narrative in this section as it does rather unfocused. Again, just suggesting that you think of organization and structure for this part.
Are there any developments on the dramas that Pompeo was developing for ABC? This is more of a clarification question, as they could have been quietly dropped.
I am not sure the quote about the dog and her asthma is necessary as you already have the information in your own words and the quote seems a little repetitive.
While the quote ("Our characters are on television, the real world has Hillary Clinton.”) is very good, I would find a better way to present it as it is kind of just dropped into the paragraph.
Make sure to fix the final entry in the “Television” chart.
I would add for Grey’s Anatomy that she was also a director and put the name of the episode.
This is a note that I have received a lot in past FACs, FLCs, and even in a few GANs. Please make sure that all of your works/publishers for each individual references is linked. I think this is done so anyone can find out more information from clicking on any reference without having to go through the list of references to the first time a work/publisher was referenced and linked. Also, make sure the titles of the works/publishers are italicized or not italicized where appropriate (i.e. Variety should in italics, etc.) So I would highly suggest going back through the references just to make sure that everything is linked and correctly cited. I am horrible with references so you already much better than me about this lol.

I have to disagree, it usually brings up concerns of overlinking.

Thank you for the note. That makes sense to me; I was only pass along that note as I have received a lot during source reviews for FAC, but I agree with you. Aoba47 (talk) 14:14, 9 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Summary for Comments (Round 1)

Wonderful work with the article so far. These are my first round of comments and suggestions. I would suggest focusing on the references and giving more shape to the “Grey's Anatomy and other works” subsection for now as those are the main areas for improvement and then going through everything else. Once my comments are addressed, I will look through this again and add more. This actually inspires me to work on an article on a real person (I attempted one in the past and it was a lot more difficult than I had anticipated). Aoba47 (talk) 19:19, 4 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I have tried to address all the comments, let me know how I feel. Thanks a lot for the comments, and I apologize for presenting a rather under-prepared article. NumerounovedantTalk 12:11, 9 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for addressing my comment; honestly, the article was not really that under-prepared at all. Just as food for thought, it may be helpful to break up the rather large "Grey's Anatomy and other works (2005–present)" subsection into two, especially as her career continues. Otherwise, you have done excellent work with this. I will ✓ Pass this and I look forward to working with you further in the future. Aoba47 (talk) 14:14, 9 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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