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"Elizabeth was taught by her father, who was organist at the Holywell parish church and was also blind" - who else was also blind? This is the first mention of anyone being blind
"Elizabeth went on to tour the country as a child, performing with John Parry" - I noticed that there are two John Parry's, so perhaps a disambiguation here is needed. I originally clicked on the John Parry link in the biography section, and wondered how Elizabeth could have played with somebody who died in 1782! I then realised there were two people with the same name, so some kind of notice would benefit the reader
"Perhaps due to his lack of sight, his had parents placed him to be trained" - remove 'had'?
"under the blind harpist John Parry, where he excelled" - would whom he excelled under sound better? Feel free to ignore
"One the night of the concert" - on
"in Liverpool Her musical skill at" - missing full stop
I just realised that the confusion with the two John Parry's is addressed in the first note. This is a great article, I enjoyed reading it. It's compact and comprehensive for the subject, hence the fairly short review. Once all of the above are clarified then it should have no problem passing. JAGUAR21:11, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
All done, thank you very much for your speedy review, we hope you enjoyed reading about her as much as we did. P.S. We have other women waiting for GA reviews (not Welsh ones though) if you have some spare time! ツStacey (talk) 21:41, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for addressing them! Without any further ado I'll promote this, it meets the criteria. Nice work. I'll be happy to take the other GANs you currently have. JAGUAR19:15, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Change the death year form 1929 to 1829 per reference [9]
Elizabeth moved to Liverpool, teaching harp, piano and singing regularly at a school in Ellesmere,[8] and returning each weekend to attend to her father, until his death in 1823.[1] Elizabeth's health was described as "delicate" and she died of "decline"[6] on 6th May 1829[9] in Liverpool.[10] Her musical skill at such a young age left her known as the "Little Cambrian Prodigy".[1] — Preceding unsigned comment added by 173.79.125.149 (talk) 12:26, 15 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
JAGUAR 21:11, 4 April 2016 (UTC)
JAGUAR 19:15, 5 April 2016 (UTC)