Talk:Elizabeth Olsen/GA1
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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 20:11, 22 May 2021 (UTC)
Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 20:11, 22 May 2021 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
[edit]- Per MOS:ORDER, hatnotes should go right below the short description.
- "Award among other awards" sounds repetitive. Maybe "accolades"?
Early life and education
[edit]- "in musical theatre camp" → "in a musical theatre camp"
- I'm not sure this holds the same meaning. The reference does not specify that it was one camp; I think the intention was to generally say she spent time attending camp the way people would say they went to sleep-away camp as children. I also believe the appropriate phrasing is
at camp
as opposed toin camp
, so I made the change. I hope this suffices. KyleJoantalk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)
- I'm not sure this holds the same meaning. The reference does not specify that it was one camp; I think the intention was to generally say she spent time attending camp the way people would say they went to sleep-away camp as children. I also believe the appropriate phrasing is
- This source (#12) does not mention Campbell Hall School.
- I replaced the Marie Claire ref with The Hollywood Reporter, but I couldn't find a source that verifies for what grades she was there, so I removed that part. KyleJoantalk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)
- Shouldn't "Off-Broadway" be written as off-Broadway in the article?
Career
[edit]- Distribute the 3 references after Endgame.
- "comedy drama" → "comedy-drama"
- Distribute the sources after "slyly sympathetic".
- The references after "respective reviews" should be swapped (NPR before Vox).
Personal life and acting credits
[edit]- "Olsen stated" sounds off and the grammar tool I'm using marks it as an error - reword?
- I changed the phrasing to neutrally state that she has been an atheist since the quote already lets readers know that she made a statement about it. KyleJoantalk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)
- Change "Girl In Car" to simply "Girl in car" per MoS.
- Other than that, the one-paragraph sentence and the filmography table look good.
Awards and nominations
[edit]- WP:SMALLTEXT says the text font should not be made small in tables. For accessibility purposes, I suggest making the small notes actual notes.[Note 1]
References
[edit]- All 92/92 sources are archived.
- #20 is missing an author.
- The Daily Telegraph ref does not list an author. Maybe I'm missing it? KyleJoantalk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)
- Done Yep, I missed it. I was looking at an archived link that did not contain the author's name. Sorry about that! KyleJoantalk 02:47, 28 May 2021 (UTC)
- The Daily Telegraph ref does not list an author. Maybe I'm missing it? KyleJoantalk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)
- #23, #68, #74, and #76 are missing access-dates.
- Links to Vulture should go to Vulture (website) per WP:NOTBROKEN.
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