Talk:Electrick Children

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Did you know... that Rebecca Thomas wrote and directed Electrick Children, a film with a budget of US$1 million, while she was still a university student?

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Anne drew Andrew and Drew (talk · contribs) 01:48, 10 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Well written

Overall: Y No outstanding issues, I italicized the first instance of film name in lead section as per MOS:FILM
Lead section: Unchecked
Article layout: Unchecked
Words to watch: Unchecked
Writing about fiction: Unchecked
List incorporation: Unchecked

Verifiable

Citations: Y All appear to be well formatted. Citation 7 appears to be broken. Leaving for now in-case it's salvageable.
Reliable sources: Y Well sourced throughout the article save for the plot section (which is okay to be left unsourced per WP:FILMPLOT)
No Original Research: Y all good here
No Copyright Violations or Plagiarism: Unchecked

Broad in coverage

All major aspects: Y everything major seems to be covered
No unnecessary detail: Y no issues here

Neutral point of view

Overall: Y no issues here
Due weight given to topics: Unchecked

Stable: Y yep
Images

Well illustrated (if possible): Y Good, high-quality images
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Fair use rationale given for non-free content: Unchecked
Images are relevant: Unchecked

Pass/Fail: To be determined...

Comment:

Plot

When she finds herself to be pregnant, she is convinced that she has conceived miraculously...

Could this sentence be tightened up? Maybe After becoming pregnant, she is convinced that she has conceived miraculously... instead. AdA&D 02:16, 10 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

In Las Vegas Rachel falls in with a group of skaters who live together and play in a band, after being drawn to one of the boys who wears a shirt with a cassette on it

Not sure this is clear enough. Is she attracted to this boy? How about after falling in love with one of the boys who wears a shirt with a cassette on it or after becoming attracted to with one of the boys who wears a shirt with a cassette on it instead? AdA&D 02:16, 10 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Mr. Will joins her reluctantly and pleads with her...

This is a bit confusing. Was she asking him to join her? If so it should be made clear that she wanted to talk to him. Or did he seek out and find her? Maybe Mr. Will finds her and pleads with her... instead. AdA&D 02:16, 10 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

one night he offers to marry her, saying that together they can look for the man on the tape.

Why are they looking for the man on the tape? Not sure this was made clear. AdA&D 02:16, 10 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Other than that, nice work! AdA&D 02:04, 10 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Anne drew Andrew and Drew: Thanks for your suggestions! The plot of the film is quite strange and difficult to explain, so it was useful to see the parts that were unclear to you – I have reworded the phrases you mentioned above, so hopefully it is clearer now. You are right about citation 7 – the original URL is now a dead link, but the citation also includes a link to an archived version of the original page. Many thanks for the review, and for what it's worth I'm a big fan of your username. :) 97198 (talk) 12:19, 11 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Awesome, thanks for changing those. Citation 7 (the archive link at https://web.archive.org/web/20170308224657/http://arts.columbia.edu/columbia-continues-streak-spirit-awards) is still giving me The requested page could not be found. See this image. AdA&D 13:49, 11 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Anne drew Andrew and Drew: That's odd, it appears fine for me. I've changed it to an older archive link from 2012 ([1]). Is it still giving you the same problem? 97198 (talk) 00:12, 12 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Ah, you know what, it seemed to be an issue with the browser I was using. Sorry about that! With all the above issues addressed, I'm happy to pass the article. Thanks for your contributions! AdA&D 03:53, 12 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]