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Reviewer: TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contribs) 03:34, 19 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]


  • "The effects of Hurricane Wilma in Mexico consisted of strong winds, record rainfall, and high tides." - I mean, yeah, but this is about as generic of a start as possible. C'mon, dig deep! Be creative!
  • "Three months prior to Wilma, Hurricane Emily also struck the same region." - Is this needed? If Emily compounded the effects, then sure, but I don't see a connection drawn later in the article.
  • "The large and powerful hurricane dropped torrential rainfall in the region, with 1,576 mm (62.0 in) recorded at Isla Mujeres over a 24 hour period" - Lemme see a hyphen in 24-hour period.
  • "Wilma damaged 28,980 houses and destroyed at least 4,571 others." - I think there's some rule somewhere that says the most notable aspects should go first, so destroyed before damaged.
  • "Wilma contributed to eight deaths in Mexico – seven in Quintana Roo and one Yucatán ." - Missing a word before Yucatan. Also, the period is flying away!
  • " the Hurricane Hunters recorded a minimum pressure of 882 mbar (26.0 inHg)" - Common TC practice is to use inches to the tenths right? 26.05 inHg.
  • "Wilma weakened as drifted northwestward through the Caribbean over the next two days" - Missing a word. I think we can make everything after the semi-colon a new sentence too.
  • "As the hurricane approached, these watches were upgraded to a hurricane warning and expanded from Chetumal near Belize to San Felipe, Yucatán" - Plural watches --> plural hurricane warnings.
  • 'Los Premios MTV Latinoamérica – the MTV Video Music Awards Latinoamérica – were canceled due to the hurricane, scheduled originally to occur in Playa del Carmen on October 20." - scheduled originally to originally scheduled? Flows better.
  • "Hurricane Wilma affected parts of northeast Mexico that were struck by Hurricane Emily in July, as well as Hurricane Stan, which struck Mexico two weeks before Wilma." - Same deal as earlier about whether this is needed.
  • This is the citation so I can mention it in the lead. We usually mention when areas were affected by a notable landfall, or other additional storms. It helps put the storm into context. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 13:46, 19 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "While drifting near the Yucatán peninsula, Hurricane Wilma set a record in Mexico for the nation's highest 24 hour rainfall total," - HYPHEN
  • "On the Mexican mainland, a station in Cancún recorded 10 minute sustained winds of 160 km/h (100 mph)," - 10 MINUTE NEEDS A HYPHEN
  • "...it was estimated at 230 km/h (140 mph)." - What was?
  • "Hurricane Wilma also damaged coastal coral reefs." - You started the previous sentence with Hurricane Wilma, so maybe "The (hurricane/storm/cyclone)"?
  • "In Cancún, the wave action washed away about 700,000 m3 (247 million ft3)" - Washed away what? My hopes and dreams?
  • "Across the region, Wilma damaged 473 schools,[1] including about 60% of Quintana Roo's schools; damage to schools was estimated at $156 million (MXN, US$14.8 million)." - Schools are mentioned three different times in this sentence. Maybe change the last usage to "these structures"?
  • "High floodswaters damaged bridges to Telchac Puerto, Chabihau, and Santa Rosa" - I spy with my little eye a typo.
  • In general in the Impact section, you use the word "wrecked" a lot.
  • "President Fox pledged that 75% of the hotels would be repaired by December 15, pledging loans and tax breaks to restore the industry." - Lots of pledging.
  • "On November 28, the Official Journal of the Federation announced a disaster area for nine of Quintana Roo's 11 municipalities" - Numbers under 10 are spelled out, except when combined in a sentence with a higher number. Nine --> 9
  • "The new beaches were not as smooth or white as the previous beach, which formed naturally over time." - Not entirely sure this is worthy of being mentioned. Not a dealbreaker for me though.
  • It was mentioned in a few articles. Cancun's beaches used to be pristine white and clean, which was part of its whole international tourist draw. I wasn't sure if I struck the right balance between being informative about the aftermath, or if it's trivial. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 13:46, 19 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Spelling error in reference 34.

Good, quick work with only a few minor tweaks needed! 🌧❄ϟ TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 03:34, 19 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks TA! I believe I got all of the issues. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 13:46, 19 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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