Talk:Effects of Hurricane Floyd in New Jersey/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hurricane Noah (talk · contribs) 03:25, 11 March 2019 (UTC)

Will do. Noah^Talk 03:25, 11 March 2019 (UTC)

I don't like these "claiming" GA reviews. It's kind of gaming the system. If you don't have time to review the article, then you shouldn't claim it. I'm calling out User:Yellow Evan - sorry, but the suspense is too much for the person nominating the GAN! :P ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 21:51, 11 March 2019 (UTC)

Review

• Overall, this article is in decent shape. I have made some suggestions for improvement below. I completed the review less than a day after claiming it :P Noah^Talk 00:48, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

Thank you for the review! ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:11, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

Eh... I usually link things once in each level 2 section. Just depends on the person tbh. Anyways... passing. Noah^Talk 20:26, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

Lead

• Link New Jersey

• Done. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:11, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

• "A police lieutenant took his life after working for nearly 48 hours coordinating floodwater rescues" could be shortened to 'A police lieutenant took his life after coordinating floodwater rescues for nearly 48 hours'

• Good idea. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:11, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

Preparations

• Link Florida

• Done. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:11, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

• "until a torn toward the north occurred." Typo

• Oops. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:11, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

• Link North Carolina

• It's already linked in the lede. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:11, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

• "Rutgers University closed classes for two days" Might just be me, but closed classes doesn't sound right.

• Nope, it's not just you, it sounds weird. Changed to "canceled." ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:11, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

Impact

• Link New Jersey

• Can I ask why? Wikilinks are most useful when they serve a purpose to a reader. By the time they get to the impact section, I don't want the readers to accidentally click on a marginally-related link. Sure, the effects were in New Jersey, but IDK, linking again here feels like overlinking. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:11, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

• "The peak statewide precipitation during Floyd 14.13 in (359 mm) in Little Falls" Add 'was'

• Done. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:11, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

• "about half of whom in Somerset and Bergen counties." this part needs some work

• Changed to "about half of which occurred in..." ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:11, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

• "Storm-related power outages affected around 616,400 homes and businesses, for some lasting five days." last part of the sentence needs a little work.

• Changed ending to " lasting up to five days." ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:11, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

• "with three destroyed:" could be changed to 'and destroyed three more:'

• Done. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:11, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

• Is it really necessary to state the storm that passed Irene in the amount of damage done?

• I thought it was worth mentioning Sandy, especially since that was only a year after Irene. I thought it useful for the reader. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:11, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

• "The worst flooding damage occurred in Somerset County, where the floods isolated several townships, destroyed and damaged 75% of the bridges." this sentence needs some work.

• Changed ending to "where several townships became isolated, and about 75% of the bridges were destroyed or damaged. " ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:11, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

• "Two people drowned in the city when they refused to evacuate their apartment." 'after refusing' is shorter and flows better.

• Agreed. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:11, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

• "The Flooding in Franklin Township caused" Make flooding lowercase

• done. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:11, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

• Additionally, that sentence should be corrected as it currently reads that the damage occurred after the books were destroyed.

• Changed ending to "where 20,000 books were destroyed" ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:11, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

• "The floods damaged about more than 100 homes in Dunellen." either word would work.

• Eek, done. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:11, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

• "Gusty winds and saturated soils" soil should be singular as it is a mass noun.

• Done. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:11, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

• "A police lieutenant in Cranford in Union County took his life after working for nearly 48 hours coordinating floodwater rescues" virtually the same fix here as in the lead.

• That's because I copied from the article to put it in the lede. Done. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:11, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

Aftermath

• "Bergen, Essex, Hunterdon, Mercer, Middlesex, Morris, Passaic, Somerset, and Union" First mention in the section should be linked.

• They're all linked earlier in the article. See below. Otherwise it's overlinking. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:11, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

• Link New Jersey
• Link Manville
• Link Raritan River
• Link Bound Brook
• Link New Jersey Department of Environmental Protection

• Done. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:11, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

• "a bill to prevent landlords from rising rents" should be 'raising'

• Quite true. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:11, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

• Link United States Department of Justice

• Done. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)

• "sued the borough in 2004 due to the housing policy, which resulted in a change in the borough's housing policy." I don't like having borough and housing policy mentioned twice in the same sentence.

• Rewrote to avoid duplicate wording. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:11, 12 March 2019 (UTC)