Talk:Effects of Hurricane Dennis in Jamaica/GA1

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 00:19, 1 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, CB. I will be reviewing this article tonight. This will be my first Good Article review for the WikiCup. It appears to be a pretty decent article, so it is almost GA-worthy. Anyway, I did find a few issues that I feel must be addressed before I pass this article.--12george1 (talk) 00:19, 1 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"In early July 2005, Hurricane Dennis brushed Jamaica, bringing torrential rain and damaging floods to the island nation." - I don't know if this is required, but shouldn't the opening sentence start with something like "The effects of Hurricane Dennis..."?
- WP:REDUNDANCY: "...if the article title is merely descriptive...the title does not need to appear verbatim in the main text." Additionally, MOS:BOLDTITLE indicates it should be written in "normal English" and not be in bold. ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 19:43, 2 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"Forming from a tropical depression on July 4," - I hate to sound nitpicky because this isn't the main article or the MH article, but why not say it formed near the Windward Islands?
- It's there for timing. Only half of a sentence so I don't see an issue with it personally. ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 19:43, 2 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]
I think the damage toll should be mentioned in the lead
There's some inconsistency with American vs. metric units. For example, "Many places recorded over 300 mm (12 in) of rain," vs. "accumulations peaked at 24.54 in (623 mm) in Mavis Bank."
"Bull Bay where graves were unearthered." - "unearthered" ---> "unearthed"
"Landslides in Portland Parish rendered roads impassible and damaged many homes." - The definition of "impassible" is "incapable of suffering or of experiencing pain". I'm pretty sure that should be "impassable" :P
- "Tomato tamato" :P (fixed) ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 19:43, 2 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"However, in combination with the effects of a drought early in 2005, inflation values required adjustment upwards from 9% to 14.3%[12]" - There's no period at the end of that sentence
Overall, it was a pretty decent article. Just fix these issues in a timely manner and I will have no problem passing it and listing it as a Good Article.--12george1 (talk) 00:19, 1 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Everything should be in order now (or explained in a reply). Thanks for the review, George! ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 19:43, 2 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  - Yep, everything does looks good. Thank you for not taking too much time to fix all of this. I will now pass it and list this as a Good Article--12george1 (talk) 19:51, 2 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]