Talk:Edward Wells (RNZAF officer)

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Review: November 4, 2020. (Reviewed version).

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I reckon this is over dabbed. There aren't that many Edwards Wells, so Edwards Wells (pilot) should suffice. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:54, 1 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Peacemaker67, thanks for the advice, I have moved as suggested. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 02:00, 2 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

No worries mate. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:21, 2 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 19:39, 2 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

The second paragraph of the lead contains five sentences all starting with "He". Can this be varied a bit?

Have revised, how does it read now? Zawed (talk) 08:03, 3 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"The Second World War was well underway at the time of Wells' completion of flying training and, now a pilot officer," - Link pilot officer

Done. Zawed (talk) 08:03, 3 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"The next month Wells was promoted to flying officer" - Link flying officer

Actually linked in the previous paragraph, when another RAF pilot is mentioned. Zawed (talk) 08:03, 3 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

What was the cause of death?

None of my sources say. Zawed (talk) 08:03, 3 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

The later life section has three sentences starting with "He" and a fourth with "His". Can this be varied?

Have revised, how is it now? Zawed (talk) 08:03, 3 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Is there a specific reason why RAF Bawdsey is not included in the list of his commands in the infobox

Have added. Zawed (talk) 08:03, 3 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Considering consolidating the later life and postwar career sections, these are both rather short sections.

I understand where you are coming from as they are both short sections but I prefer to keep them that way since they are quite logically fall into military life and civilian life. Zawed (talk) 08:03, 3 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

External link is about Alan Deere, doesn't look relevant

That's embarrassing - I cut and pasted from the Alan Deere article so as to keep the language of the description consistent. I changed the name but forgot to update the link! Fixed now. Zawed (talk) 08:03, 3 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good beyond those little points, placing on hold. Hog Farm _Bacon 20:31, 2 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for taking the time to review this article. I have responded to your points above, I hope they are satisfactory. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 08:03, 3 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]