Talk:Edward Gibbons/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 11:28, 3 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"and he later received degrees from the Cambridge University and Oxford University" perhaps you meant to say "from the Universities of Cambridge and Oxford".
- Indeed! Done
"at King's College, Cambridge as " comma after Cam.
- Done
"Clocke?. " don't need that double punc.
- Done
"former is particularly moving" seems like someone's opinion.
- Clarified
"1603 London plague outburst which " link. And shouldn't it be "to which"?
- "To which" seems better; linked to bubonic plague as I don't think a more specific article exists for that time
"more famous Orlando" is "more famous" needed? Encyclopedic even?
- Changed to "better-known", if that's better? I would say yes, since Edward is minor figure compared to Orlando
"c. 1540–1595" if it's only the 1540 which is circa, this should be c. 1540 – 1595.
- I believe both are uncertain
  - Just checked, and your version makes more sense
If this is BritEng (with strong ties I would imagine that makes sense), baptised is with an s, not a z. Check throughout.
- Standardized, I believe
"from Cambridge University and" the University of Cambridge.
- Done
Likewise for "the other place".
- Done
"1591/1592" previously just used two digits on the second year in consecutive year range like this. Check throughout.
- Standardized
"couple would have six" had?
- Done
"quarter shillings split" link specifically not to a generic article about "shilling".
- linked to Shilling (British coin), instead
"notorious" puts some POV on it, any reason why "known" isn't more encyclopedic in tone?
- Good point, changed to your suggestion
"are virtually unknown," by "virtually" do you mean "almost completely"?
- Indeed, changed to "largely"
"characterizes" ENGVAR.
- Fixed
"The works seem considerably routine, described" I would remove Wikipedia telling us how the works seem and stick with "The works are described..."
- Clarified
Could we get row scopes in the table too, for the name of the work?
- Good point, done now
Fix the last row (No other works...) so it doesn't sort, or remove it.
- Fixed sorting
"194r-199v" en-dash.
- Fixed
Harvard errors showing in the hidden categories, have you put a publication year for each use of the {{sfn}} template, for instance?
- Indeed, seems to be a Rayner ref; fixed now

That's all I have for now. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 18:53, 3 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks for this The Rambling Man. I believe I've addressed everything, but am happy to take another look should you find more issues. Aza24 (talk) 23:21, 3 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]