Talk:Edward Ford (physician)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: AustralianRupert (talk · contribs) 13:28, 30 March 2012 (UTC)

I shall be reviewing this article against the Good Article criteria, following its nomination for Good Article status. AustralianRupert (talk) 13:28, 30 March 2012 (UTC)

Comments

• I made a few edits to the article, could you please check that you are happy with these and adjust as you see fit?
  • All fine. Hawkeye7 (talk) 18:55, 30 March 2012 (UTC)
• I wonder if the lead could be expanded a little, perhaps with a few details of the subject's academic career?
  • Done Hawkeye7 (talk) 18:55, 30 March 2012 (UTC)
• "Ford had all available supplies of sulphaguanidine in Australia shipped up to New Guinea". This might lead a little bit of context. Perhaps "Ford had all available supplies of sulphaguanidine in Australia shipped up to New Guinea, where Australian forces were fighting a desperate campaign against the Japanese", or something similar;
  • Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 18:55, 30 March 2012 (UTC)
• inconsistent capitalisation: "bachelor of medicine and bachelor of surgery" as opposed to "Graduate Diploma in Tropical Medicine" (my suggestion is to add capitals to the former, as I thinki it is a proper noun;
  • Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 18:55, 30 March 2012 (UTC)
• "he became the Medical Officer in charge of the Commonwealth Laboratory in Darwin". Is this a title? If so, it should probably presented as "Medical Officer in Charge of the Commonwealth Laboratory in Darwin";
  • Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 18:55, 30 March 2012 (UTC)
• the section titled "Second World War" might be better presented as "Military career" as it includes information on his post war career also;
  • Done Hawkeye7 (talk) 18:55, 30 March 2012 (UTC)
• "But the biggest medical problem was malaria". I think this might need to be clarified. The biggest medical problem for whom? Would this work: "But the biggest medical problem for the Allies in the Pacific was malaria"? Or is that overstating it? Perhaps: "But the biggest medical problem for the Australians in New Guinea was malaria"?
  • Re-worded. Hawkeye7 (talk) 18:55, 30 March 2012 (UTC)
• "where the Burkitt-Ford library is". Should this be "Burkitt-Ford Library"?
  • Done. 18:55, 30 March 2012 (UTC)
• "In 1976, he published his Bibliography of Australian Medicine 1790–1900,[14] "one reason Ford's name will be..." It feels as if something is missing here (after the citation). Perhaps the quote needs attribution of something similar. For example, "In 1976, he published his Bibliography of Australian Medicine 1790–1900.[14] The definitive nature of the work resulted in it being cited by author Joe Bloggs as "one reason Ford's name will be..."AustralianRupert (talk) 14:06, 30 March 2012 (UTC)
  • Done. I don't usually like doing this unless the source is notable. Do you think that Ben Haneman [1] is notable?
    • Difficult to say. Possibly not Wiki-notable, but I think enough of an authority in the area in which the quote is being made. I'm not wedded to the suggestion, so if you want to remove it, that is fine. AustralianRupert (talk) 22:29, 30 March 2012 (UTC)

Technical review

• a (Disambiguations): b (Linkrot) c (Alt text) d (Copyright)

Criteria

• It is reasonably well written.

  a (prose): b (MoS):

• It is factually accurate and verifiable.

  a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

• It is broad in its coverage.

  a (major aspects): b (focused):

• It follows the neutral point of view policy.

  a (fair representation): b (all significant views):

• It is stable.

  No edit wars etc.:

• It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.

  a (tagged and captioned): b (Is illustrated with appropriate images): c (non-free images have fair use rationales): d public domain pictures appropriately demonstrate why they are public domain:

• Overall:

  a Pass/Fail: