Talk:Edinburgh International Climbing Arena/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:17, 11 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry about the delay in getting to this. I'll try and address these points in the next few hours. James^x12345 15:40, 15 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Lead is a little on the light side. Could be expanded a little to summarise a bit more of the history and functionality of the place.
- Have expanded somewhat, more to come.
"After facing financial problems months after opening..." after .. after... repetitive.
- Reworded.
"GB£" not sure this is strictly required, could just link £ if you're really concerned that a reader won't know what a British pound is.
- I tend to use {{GBP}} as it adds a non-breaking space, but I'm happy to change it if you think it looks cluttered.
" program of works" programme (unless we're American or writing computer applications).
- Good spot.
Any history on the very first version of the quarry, i.e. when the first one was dug out?
- I couldn't find anything more than the sentence beginning "Originally used for supplying stone..." It wasn't an especially noteworthy quarry, but I'll do a bit more research.
  - I'd love to find the actual history of the quarry, but there seem to be a huge number of quarries in the area and I don't want to get the wrong one. James^x12345 16:37, 15 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"work had been done." yuck to "done", perhaps "carried out".
- Reworded again.
"SportScotland" looks like it's spelled "Sportscotland".
- Another good find.
"cost to be GB£7 million, with GB£1.5 million coming" -> "with funding of £1.5 million to come from..."
- Much nicer.
"During... during" repetitive.
- Fixed.
"When it opened in September 2003, it was the largest..." perhaps "When it opened in September 2003, the arena was the largest..."
- Done
You linked "indoor climbing" in the lead, but just "climbing" here, be consistent.
- Removed link to climbing.
How did the estimate go from 7 million to 22 million? Important...
- The BBC article just gives "problems" - there doesn't appear to be a simple reason, but losing part of the roof can't have helped. Acknowledging it makes it somewhat clearer though.
Would link "bouldering".
- Linked in first instance.
"The articulated climbing wall." no need for the full stop on the caption, it's not a complete sentence.
- Removed full stops from all captions.
But don't overlink bouldering!
- Fixed
No need to link common terms such as "gym".
- Fixed
Never overkeen on galleries, would suggest that contextual images are used in contextual places throughout the article instead.
- Removed
BBC News or BBC News? Be consistent with italics.
- There was an accidental {{cite web}} which renders differently (not many people seem to know this!)

A few issues so I'll put it on hold for a week. The Rambling Man (talk) 10:04, 13 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"IFSC World Youth Championship, 2010" IFSC is mentioned in the caption but nowhere else.
- Added link to world championships.
  - I know it's picky, but you still haven't mentioned IFSC in the prose. Just in the caption, albeit linked. The Rambling Man (talk) 19:11, 18 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
    - It was actually a mistake with the name. Thanks for bringing that to my attention. James^x12345 19:30, 18 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Suggest you avoid that left-aligned image....
- I thought a bit of variety would be good, but it looks better with them all to the right. I've added another {{Clear}} to keep the layout tidy. James^x12345 16:17, 18 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

The Rambling Man (talk) 08:43, 18 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Promoted, well done. The Rambling Man (talk) 18:42, 22 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. James^x12345 21:45, 22 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]