Talk:Edgardo Labella/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Larry Hockett (talk · contribs) 08:33, 27 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I will review. I notice that the nominator has not been active in the last few weeks, so I will leave some initial feedback. If an editor responds within a few days, we can continue the review from there. Larry Hockett (Talk) 08:33, 27 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

The lead section is too short to summarize an article of this size.
"currently serving" - see WP:WTW regarding relative time references

Early life

"completed his elementary education at Mabolo Elementary School" - redundant; presumably one would not complete any other type of education at an elementary school

Early career

"Cabahug Law office" - why a lowercase o in office?
This section reads like a resume. It seems like he held some high-level positions that would have received some coverage in reliable sources. I wonder if he investigated any high-profile officials, for example.

Political career

I am assuming that the councilor positions are three-year terms, but the prose doesn't make this very clear.
"namely Jose Daluz III and Ronald Cuenco" - The use of "namely" isn't strong writing in English, especially when it appears three times in an entry. Instead, just tell us their names.
"after then Mayor Michael Rama" - after Mayor Michael Rama (we know you are talking about then)
Most of the political material is just election results. What did the subject actually support or accomplish as a politician?
"declared his intention to run as Mayor of Cebu City" - run for
"fellow partymate former Mayor" - former mayor (it is clear from the surrounding context that they shared a party)
"the same elective position" - the same position

Controversies

Sinulog 2019 fiasco - fiasco is non-neutral
Bambi Beltran - update in the case from 2019?
On June 2019 - In June 2019 (but... COVID wasn't known in June 2019. Do you mean June 2020?)
"inadequate management and response" - it is non-neutral to say this in Wikipedia's voice

Let's stop there for now and see if there's a response. Larry Hockett (Talk) 09:02, 27 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Since the review has been open for nearly two weeks with no substantive edits to the entry in months, I think we can close this nomination now. The entry can be nominated again if a nominator emerges with a willingness to address the review feedback. Such efforts should probably start with expansion of the political sections. Thanks. Larry Hockett (Talk) 13:32, 12 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]