Talk:Ed Barrow/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 05:08, 16 October 2012 (UTC)

I'll review this article in the next couple days. Wizardman 05:08, 16 October 2012 (UTC)

Here are my issues:

• " and were World Series champions ten times." 10
• American Association links to a dab page currently.
• The first section can just say early life, since early career would be implied there.
• "Nebraska for six years, before" rm comma

A few things to work on, will review the rest tomorrow since my eyes are giving out. Wizardman 04:37, 21 October 2012 (UTC)

And here's the rest:

• "Barrow served as field manager, until " rm comma
• "With the Tigers, Barrow feuded with Kid Elberfeld." I'd add shortstop ahead of Kid so we know it's a player; i would've guessed front office before clicking the link.
• "Barrow was named Executive of the Year by The Sporting News in 1941, the second time he won the award." when was the first?

Article's now on hold. Wizardman 03:53, 22 October 2012 (UTC)

• All corrected. – Muboshgu (talk) 21:22, 22 October 2012 (UTC)

  Looks good, so I'll pass the article. Wizardman 04:30, 23 October 2012 (UTC)