Talk:Economy of the Han dynasty/GA1

GA Review

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I'll be reviewing this article shortly. Ealdgyth - Talk 15:11, 7 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS):
some easter egg links that need to be fixed, and couple of prose spots that are unclear
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
I do have concerns about the number of images and some of the quality of them, but not enough to hold back GA.
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Specific concerns

File:Pottery tower 1.JPG is REALLY fuzzy. Suggest a better quality picture.

Really? There are more pictures of towers, but I hate being redundant and using the same ones over and over in Han-related articles. This one is kind of fuzzy, but come one, it's not THAT fuzzy, is it? I've seen much worse.--Pericles of Athens^Talk 17:55, 7 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

It's pretty bad. I am a photographer by living and this one is ... bad. Everything is out of focus, pretty much (Looks like a classic case of lens shake, honestly) Ealdgyth - Talk 18:25, 7 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Suggest a cull of some of the pictures. There are a LOT, and a number of them are of poor quality. Removing the poor quality ones would give more impact to the ones that remain, whereas now they just sorta run all together. I won't hold GA status back on this, but too many pictures is almost as bad as no pictures.

Ok. I could think of a few that could be dumped come time for FAC review.--Pericles of Athens^Talk 17:55, 7 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

* Lead: "... was a period of economic stability and disaster,..." huh? Did it have both? If so, suggest rewording to "was a period with times of economic stability alongside times of economic disaster" or something similar. As it's worded now, it seems to imply that the stability and disaster were simultaneous. * Lead: I'm not happy with this easter egg link. "...more and more on commercial exchanges with [[Society and culture of the Han Dynasty|wealthy landowners who owned large agricultural estates]]..." Strongly suggest rewording this somehow. Same for the later one "... the Han government [[History of the Han Dynasty|became heavily decentralized due to economic and political crises]] while the great landowners..." See WP:EGG for more information. * Urbanization: more eggs ruins of [[Science and technology of the Han Dynasty#Structural engineering|which still stand today]]) * Circulation: Who is Sadao Nishijima? Suggest a quick "historian" or "economist" to explain why his opinion is important. * Circulation: Egg coins every year [[Economy of the Song Dynasty|while 3,000,000,000 coins in 1045 CE and 5,860,000,000 coins in 1080 CE were made]] in the * Circulation: Who is Angus Maddison? As above, a quickie explanation of why he's important would help. * Landowners: Same deal with Patricia Buckley Ebrey. * There is a bit of overlinking going on. Surely we don't need to link to boats, wheelbarrows, shopkeepers, biography, tomb, canal, rice, wheat, beans, barley, pear, plum, peach, apricot, chicken, duck, goose, beef, pork, rabbit, owl, silk, iron, stove, hoe, dog, slipper, coffin, gemestone, pearl, ivory, paper, ink, orchard, mural, stable, plowing, raisin, lion, elephant, glass, sugar, salt, grape? ANd the boat link in tax reforms makes even LESS sense, since it's to "maritime history"

I've reduced somewhat the "easter egg" bits by removing some "the" "and" etc. from piped links. They work better outside the links.

* Private manufacture: "To curb the threat of wealthy merchants and kings, the Han government..." what threat? * Goods: Another egg [[Science and technology of the Han Dynasty|Iron was also used to make military weapons]], such as... * Foreign trade: Egg again: Yet [[Protectorate of the Western Regions|once the Han subjugated the Tarim Basin]], Han envoys... * Foreign trade: Another egg: to [[Roman trade with India|purchase and stock up on Chinese silks]].

Excellent article! Just some small glitches.

I've put the article on hold for seven days to allow folks to address the issues I've brought up. Feel free to contact me on my talk page, or here with any concerns, and let me know one of those places when the issues have been addressed. If I may suggest that you strike out, check mark, or otherwise mark the items I've detailed, that will make it possible for me to see what's been addressed, and you can keep track of what's been done and what still needs to be worked on.

Sure thing! I think I've covered everything; double check to make sure.--Pericles of Athens^Talk 17:55, 7 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Everything looks good. (Just what I expect from you but that's beside the point!) Promoting now. Ealdgyth - Talk 19:07, 7 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Great! Thanks for the review.--Pericles of Athens^Talk 19:08, 7 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]