Talk:Eclogitization
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This article is very well done. It covers a large amount of material related to the subject and is very well organized. It is well written with few grammer mitakes and explaines the process very well. The figure is clear and is relavent to the expaination of the material and there are many referances to your sources. You have included many links to other articles in order to help explain your subject but a few more could be added for the different types of rocks for people who might not know about geology. - David Pipkin — Preceding unsigned comment added by DavidMP1 (talk • contribs) 12:55, 23 October 2012 (UTC)
Review by Ryan
[edit]Your article is very well organized and put together. It is very scientific yet also easy to understand, which is nice. Definitely a very good final article. There are very few things I would change, but here are a few.
Better describe what "continental undertow" is. I was still somewhat confused about what it was exactly.
Add more wiki links to the second section. Words such as "coesite" and "glaucophane".
In the second to last sentence under Fluid Influence did you forget to put what temperatures and pressures?
Is "localisnation" a word??? you used it twice under Field Studies. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Rbouch2 (talk • contribs) 05:09, 14 November 2012 (UTC)
Review by Austin
[edit]Eclogitization is the tectonic process in which the high-pressure, metamorphic rock, eclogite is formed and consequently effects a change in densities, kinematics and plate motion of subduction zones. <---- take a second look at this sentence and make sure you aren't using too many commas. You may want to break it into two sentences.
There is the argument that collision between two continents should slow down because of continental buoyancy. For convergence to continue, it should do so at a new subduction zone where oceanic crust can be consumed.[1] Certain areas such as the Alps, Zargos, and Himalayas have led geologist to believe there is "continental undertow" that continues subduction. Of the many factors leading to this "continental undertow". Eclogitization is one of the leading processes that is thought to be the fuel to continuing subduction after slab detachment in a subduction zone. <---- I was confused by the placement of this. It seemed like it was missing some kind of opening sentence. You go straight from talking about the characteristics of eclogite facies straight into something about continent collision. The paragraph is good but it needs something to tell me what I'm reading.
The Geologic Setting and Effect of Eclogitization section starts out pretty strong and when I first start reading it I'm not really sure what direction its going in. As Webb says, Tell the reader what you are about to tell them before you tell them. You may want to add a sentence or two in the initial paragraph (before the table of contents) just sort of describing where are you going with the article as a whole. why is ti important, and how are you going to show it is important in the rest of the article?
The localities section looks good. A cool figure might be just a list of all the localties with links to somewhere one might find additional resources, but it isn't necessary
The Fluid Influence section is good but could use more. Exactly how does fluid affect the process at the chemical level? In what volumes is fluid needed to keep the process going? If fluids are needed, would eclogitization only occur in deeply subducted oceanic crust? If not where else would the fluids come from? This section would be a really good chance to cite some high brow academic papers on thermodyanmics and metamorphism, and to include some really detailed data on exactly what role fluid plays. I know this is pretty modern as far as discovery so it would be good to have it in the article
The Western Gneiss Region and the Bergen Arc of Western Norway <---- double check this section for spellings
Mechanical Models <---- this is another section that you could use to provide some hard data comparisons and cite some academic articles — Preceding unsigned comment added by Abenne1 (talk • contribs) 20:47, 12 November 2012 (UTC)
Dustin B.
[edit]- Best paper I have reviewed! Well written, not to hard to understand, and good figures.
- The only thing I would change is the last heading. I would change it from Field Studies to Field Studies and Simulations since you also discuss simulations in this section. Or you could break it into two sections?
DBoyd13 (talk) 23:44, 13 November 2012 (UTC)
- It's not a paper, it's a Wikipedia article. Everybody on this talkpage is mysteriously from the geology department of Louisiana State University in 2012. The illustrations are all prefaced with "fig 1.", "fig 2.", etc., as if it was a paper, and then you've all come here to leave "reviews". I'm not sure what you're up to, but I guess it's benign. Card Zero (talk) 23:09, 27 May 2016 (UTC)
Kinematics
[edit]I'm trying to remove some jargon from the article, or at least elucidate the jargon. I propose changing this phrase:
- "which leads to a change in plate kinematics, and plate motion of subduction zones"
to this phrase:
- "which changes plate motion in subduction zones"
Is that satisfactory? Or is plate kinematics a distinct concept, and not a synonym for plate motion? We have no article for plate kinematics, and even if we did, MOS:JARGON recommends "Avoid excessive wikilinking (linking within Wikipedia) as a substitute for parenthetic explanations such as the one in this sentence." So a paranthetic explanation is needed, if the term plate kinematics is staying. What should it say? Card Zero (talk) 01:15, 28 May 2016 (UTC)
- "Plate kinematics" is a very common term in geological literature, but "plate motion" is ten times more common. It would be better, however, to not say that it (eclogitization) changes plate motion, it's a little less direct than that, so I would just change it to "which leads to changes in plate motion at convergent margins", using the more general "convergent margin" than the specific "subduction zone" to cover Delamination (geology). Mikenorton (talk) 12:12, 28 May 2016 (UTC)