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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:36, 2 October 2018 (UTC)
Comments I will review this with complete disregard to the bleak standards applied by GA, but with fairness and an eye on this being a featured article, which it is easily within reach. Feel free to ignore the nit-picky comments, but please consider that they are provided in good faith.
- " proposed in 1963. In 1968, the" repetitive.
- Removed repetition.
- "n the late 1990s, and the project received federal funding in 2006, and construction commenced in 2007." one too many run-on clauses.
- Fixed
- "Sunnyside" is piped to a redirect.
- Fixed, though redirects are not too problematic.
- " its multiple delays, its high cost, and its bloated scope. Various delays have increased the cost " a bit clunky and repetitive.
- Fixed
- "63rd St. Subway" is piped to a redirect.
- Fixed
- "being constructed" perhaps "during construction" is better.
- Done
- "Park Avenue" is piped to a redirect.
- Fixed
- "There would be two" prior to this it was all "there will be..." so I'm not sure why this sudden change of tone? Seems odd, and there are several examples of this.
- Fixed. Thanks for pointing this out. I tried to change "will" (present tense) to "would" (past tense) so it wouldn't sound outdated after a while. epicgenius (talk)
- "weekday.[14][10][15] " would order references numerically.
- Done
- " 2004,[21][18][19][22]" ditto.
- Done
- "r $10.8 billion in 2014.[18][17] " again.
- Done
- "either measure.[25][2] " again.
- Done
- "2015–2019 Capital Program" what is this?
- I tried explaining a little. epicgenius (talk) 02:25, 3 October 2018 (UTC)
- "been continually pushed back" probably not, maybe pushed back several times.
- Fixed.
- "Track length 6.1 mi (9.8 km)" (infobox) vs "$12 billion project ... a projected price of $3.5 billion per mile of track" doesn't equate.
- Fixed, some of the tunnels are preexisting and so only about 3.5 miles are brand-new track.
- "63rd Street Line" piped to a redirect.
- Fixed.
- "The New York Times" or "The New York Times", be consistent.
- It is all italics. I fixed it. epicgenius (talk) 02:25, 3 October 2018 (UTC)
- " of which $14.7 was " missing a million?
- " Catholic Archbishop Cardinal Edward Egan" proper SEAOFBLUE, best I've seen for a while.
- Assuming that's sarcastic, all except the last link has been removed, it's not necessary. epicgenius (talk) 02:25, 3 October 2018 (UTC)
- 37th Street is piped to a redirect. And 44th Street.
- These redirects actually may lead to articles in the future, so I'm keeping these.
- As is Hunterspoint Avenue.
- Fixed.
- "$76.5 million is budgeted " don't start with a number.
- Fixed.
- "As of June 2017 construction was to start in September 2017, " well it's October 2018 so this needs updating.
- Updated now.
- There's some SHOUTING in the references which could be toned down a bit.
- Fixed.
That's my first pass. It's on hold. The Rambling Man (talk) 20:58, 2 October 2018 (UTC)
- @The Rambling Man: Thanks for the comments. I'll address them shortly. epicgenius (talk) 22:39, 2 October 2018 (UTC)
- @The Rambling Man: I've addressed your comments. It might be a bit early for Featured status, though, as the project won't be complete for another several years. epicgenius (talk) 02:25, 3 October 2018 (UTC)
- Happy to pass this now, good work. The Rambling Man (talk) 14:15, 3 October 2018 (UTC)