Talk:Earle Clements/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 23:57, 29 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

This is a very good article overall, though I did find a couple issues:

"He served for a total of 28 months, attaining the rank of captain, and mustered out on September 12, 1919." 'mustered out' feels jargony to me, even though i can discern what it means rather easily.

Changed to "was discharged".

"Clements accepted, and consequently had to refuse a later request from his boyhood friend, A. B. "Happy" Chandler, to fill the same position for his campaign." Any information on the early friendship?

I wish. Only one source that I have found mentions it, but it would be fascinating, given that they became bitter political rivals for decades, apparently over this one event.

At 10 paragraphs, perhaps the governor section should be split or paragraphs combined.

I've combined a couple of paragraphs. An image would help break things up, but images for this time period are hard to find without copyright restrictions.

"Clements replaced the Kentucky Highway Patrol, which had become a corrupt vehicle of political patronage, with the Kentucky State Police." So the state police was new at that time? If so then I'm reading it right, if not then fix.

That's correct. KSP was a new organization, replacing the highway patrol.

The prose in general is rather simplistic. I have no problem with this at all, and prefer it actually, but there might be FA concerns on whether the prose is "compelling enough". That's an (non?)issue for later though.

Right now, I'm just shooting for GA, but I'll keep this in mind should I take it further.

I'll put the article on hold and pass when the issues are fixed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 06:28, 30 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review. My responses are inline above. Please let me know if there are further issues that need resolving. Acdixon ^{(talk • contribs • count)} 17:38, 1 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Everything seems good now, so I'll pass the article as a GA. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 16:55, 2 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]