Talk:Eagles in Middle-earth/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 19:47, 22 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Another day another Middle-earth GA. I have placed this article on hold for now and left my comments below. Please ping me once sou have addressed these concerns so I will know when to reevaluate. Thanks! 𓃦LunaEatsTuna (💬) 20:41, 22 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks! Chiswick Chap (talk) 21:17, 22 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Likewise for your as usual fast response! I am now pleased to pass this article for GA status. Congrats! 𓃦LunaEatsTuna (💬) 22:27, 22 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Copyvio check

Earwig says good to go. Only concern is a Wordpress blog site with material evidently plagiarised from Wikipedia. Quotations used in-line with WP:COPYQUOTE.

Noted.

Files

All files are relevant, good quality, and copyright-free:

File:Archibald Thorburn, Pair of Golden Eagles. Bonhams.jpg: valid public domain rationale;
File:Bracteate from Funen, Denmark (DR BR42).jpg: CC-BY-SA 3.0;
File:GRM Inv. J-3182.jpg: valid public domain rationale.

Noted.

Prose

In the lead, I do not think eucatastrophe has to be italicised.

Fixed.

Also in the lead, Eagle-messenger is spelled with a capital but its mention in Biblical messenger is not.

Fixed, should be capitalised.

"specialising in Old English" – wikilink Old English

Done.

"off the borders" – sounds somewhat whimsical/confusing to me. Is a more blunt word choice available, like "away from Gondolin's territory" (if that is what it means?).

Fixed.

"the longest of all Elven realms." – any chance this could be wikilinked somewhere or elaborated upon for extra context to readers?

Reworded.

"during the Three Prayers." – same concern as above.

Reworded.

"rescues Gandalf from the top of the tower there," – wikilink Gandalf as first mention in the body.

Glossed and linked.

The line "Eä, the World, was bounded by the Walls of Night, and the space above the Earth up to the Walls was divided into three regions;" reads fairly complex compared to the rest of the article. Anyway this could be simplified or explained a bit more? Possibly even an efn note could help.

Simplified.

Recommend changing "the World" to "Tolkien's fictional universe" or something more descriptive like that.

Done.

"writing on Script" – should it not be "writing for Script"? Ignore me if I am mistaken.

Tweaked. Either will do. Probably we Brits are more likely to say "on" but no matter.

Is a non-primary source available for the sentence starting "According to the fantasy artist Larry Dixon"?

I couldn't find one.

"Australia was named Gwaihiria in 1982." – the word/name Gwaihiria is mentioned nowhere else in the article.

Gwaihir is, though. Clarified.

"In The Lord of the Rings: War in the North," – recommend "In the 2011 video game The Lord of the Rings: War in the North," as to be more descriptive.

Done, much better.

Refs

All refs are RS. Passes spotcheck—no concerns with (primary) refs 1, 17–19 or (secondary) refs 4, 9, 14 or 15.

Noted.

Ref 14 is formatted strangely with its title. Also, the publication name is a URL.

Fixed both.

For "Tolkien, J. R. R. (1984b)" I do not see any other citations for Tolkien (1984).

1984a and b are Book of Lost Tales vols 1 and 2, across the whole WikiProject; the citations use a shared template, ME-ref.

Oh I see. Yes that is acceptable then.

Other

Short description, infobox, navs, other templates and cats good

Noted.

Recommend adding template:Use dmy dates

Done.

LunaEatsTuna - all done! Chiswick Chap (talk) 21:19, 22 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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