Talk:Dystopia (Iced Earth album)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: GreatOrangePumpkin (talk · contribs) 12:52, 4 December 2011 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

   Too much quotefarming

   "Songs" section too messy; try to merge it somehow, like in "Reviews" section

   The article is generally messy arranged; "Writing and recording" doesn't belong to "Background", same for "World Dystopia Tour" and "Reviews" (should be lone two-header sections), "Track listing" should be put somewhere above "Personnel"

   "Sales and chart positions" is too small; integrate it somewhere, how about into the small section "Release"?

   odd usage of hyphens, eg "Iced Earth -vocalist" (hyphen should be removed) or "Wacken -festival" (same); Hyphens should be used when you want to separate eg prefixes and sufixes (for example anti-communism) or if you want to join something, eg Compound modifiers (for example well-prepared student). However, the hyphen is often omitted

   Apart the wrong hyphen usage, the article contains several prose issues, mostly in grammar. Examples:

   "Two of the albums songs ("Dystopia" and "Tragedy and Triumph") also feature the return of the "Something Wicked" -storyline and the bands mascot Set Abominae previously featured on previous albums" - redundant repetition

   "it's the band's first album with vocalist Stu Block, who joined after former vocalist Matt Barlow left the band for a second time on August 6, 2011" - same

   "During its first week the album sold over 6,000 copies in the United States and charted in many countries" - how many is many?

   "According to Jon Schaffer and Stu Block, writing the lyrics was basically the two of them drinking beer and watching movies." - avoid noun + ing, and the last clause should be rewritten.

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   How reliable are the following sites:

   imperumi.net

   hallowed.se

   cmdistro.com

   metal-army.com

   about.com

   bravewords.com

   themetalcritic.com

   kaaoszine.fi

   discogs.com is not reliable because it is user-generated

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   rationale for File:IcedEarth2011.jpg indicates [1] as a source, although I could not find this picture anywhere on its homepage.

   no need to italicize the album in references.

7. Overall: there are too many issues, not only in references, but in prose. This should be copyedited and peer reviewed before nominating in future.

   Pass/Fail:

• Dabsolver check: Fixed three dab links
• Checklinks check: one dead
• Reflinks check: ok
• Fixed dashes