Talk:Dutch expedition to Valdivia/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 00:29, 29 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I will take this one. Comments to follow in due course. Zawed (talk) 00:29, 29 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

An interesting article. I've done a little bit of copyediting, please review my changes to check you are OK with them.

Your changes were all improvements.

Comments as follows:

Lead

Dupe link: Dutch Republic; Spanish Empire

Done.

Background

Dupe link: Huilliche

Done.

Expedition

link Hendrik Brouwer on first mention

Done.

Dupe linl: Valdivia

Done.

"Except for Brouwer and other leaders, the true objectives were not known to the participants of the expedition." This is a little unclear; are the objectives recited not the true objectives? What did the participants believe was the expedition's purpose?

Added a bit to try and clarify. Does that help? If not I will rewrite it to make clearer.

Chiloé

Dupe link: Chiloé Archipelago

Done.

"According to Diego de Rosales...": we need context for who he is; a historian presumably?

Yes. Apologies. Added.

Valdivia

Manquipillan is not redlinked but Manqueante is?

Done.

Spanish response

Dupe link: Arauco War (on Mapuche resistance)

Done.

Other stuff

References: note 10, Robert Kock ref needs formatting using the website template I think, to match note 11. Chile is spelt incorrectly

Done. I think. Wiki-referencing is not a strong point.

Bibliography: the Lane ref needs dashes in its ISBN.

Done. (Possibly.)

The Montt Pinto ref needs a place of publication and a OCLC number

Done

Captions for images shouldn't finish with fullstops

Umm. That's not my reading of MOS:CAPFRAGS. "Most captions are not complete sentences, but merely sentence fragments, which should not end with a period. If any complete sentence occurs in a caption, then all sentences, and any sentence fragments, in that caption should end with a period."

Images themselves have appropriate tags
No dablinks
External links check out OK

That's my review completed. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 09:59, 23 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Zawed: That was embarrassing. Thank you for soldiering through it. Hopefully it is a little better now. Gog the Mild (talk) 11:03, 23 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Have reviewed your changes and comment and this is looking good. I think this is well written and illustrated, covers the subject to an appropriate depth and referenced with reliable sources. Passing as GA now. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 09:31, 24 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]