Talk:Dumas Brothel/GA1
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Reviewer: Acroterion (talk · contribs) 04:04, 25 January 2015 (UTC)
An initial review:
The article appears to be suitably verifiable, neutral, stable and illustrated. My concerns center on a number of awkward or informal constructions: things like "prostitution in the country was illegalized" (prostitution in Montana was outlawed would be OK). "Much of the 1990s", "Some dissented to the restoration", "That is, until ...", "as was as", and so on. Nothing too hard to fix. My other concern is (this is because I'm an architect) that there's not a good description of the building. It's rather unique in its arrangement, but that may be hard to source. I'll look around for material. Acroterion (talk) 04:04, 25 January 2015 (UTC)
- Actually, the website has some description that could be used as a source. I've been on the tour with Mr. Giecek and have a pretty good recollection of the interior. The website ought to be listed as an external link. Acroterion (talk) 04:13, 25 January 2015 (UTC)
- @Acroterion: - I reworded some of the "After closure" section, but in regards to the "prostitution in Montana was outlawed" bit, the source explicitly says after prostitution was outlawed in the United States not just Montana. I say that because by the time prostitution was outlawed in the U.S., it was still legal in Montana (I believe it's still legal even to this day. --ceradon (talk • contribs) 04:34, 25 January 2015 (UTC)
- Well, it's still legal in some counties in Nevada, so it might be best to just say it was outlawed and leave it at that. My main concern was with the wording. Acroterion (talk) 04:36, 25 January 2015 (UTC)
- Done. --ceradon (talk • contribs) 04:39, 25 January 2015 (UTC)
- I've formalized some of the language and added an image and the museum's website. The NRHP didn't have much to offer. I'm still looking for a better description of the building that won't depend on my personal analysis. Acroterion (talk) 02:16, 14 February 2015 (UTC)