Talk:Dude Ranch (album)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Basilisk4u (talk · contribs) 18:37, 22 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

This album got me through middle school, so I will review this article. Cheers! Basilisk4u (talk) 18:37, 22 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Notes

Sorry this is taking so long :( My first impression is that the article is quite interesting and well-written, but I will get into a more detailed review quite soon. In the meantime, I feel the article could benefit from a free-use photo from Wikimedia Commons because it currently looks a bit barren. Perhaps a photo of someone who worked on the album or a musical influence for the band? Basilisk4u (talk) 02:28, 3 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

"plagued with difficulties only made worse by the quick schedule" For some reason, I feel that "rushed" would be better to use here than "quick"
The third paragraph uses words like "success" and "hit" without being specific. Add information about how high the album and singles charted instead.

Background

"The band had accumulated a genuine buzz" Where was this buzz accumulating? It sounds a bit abrupt right after the mentioning of the band not being taken seriously by the label.
"took serious looks at Interscope, Epitaph, and MCA Records" maybe "seriously considered"?
"MCA did not intervene much in the band's activities" --> "MCA rarely intervened in the band's activities"
"The two young musicians were at a creative peak" This seems a bit non-neutral for an encyclopedia article. According to whom were they at a creative peak?

Recording and production

The first paragraph uses the phrase "the band" a lot. Consider replacing it with "the group" occasionally.
"DeLonge was having vocal problems and spent much time recording and re-recording vocal tracks, and Hoppus realized he too was having vocal problems after losing his voice during a one-off Christmas concert." Perhaps instead of the second mention of "vocal problems", "difficulty singing" could be used instead?

Music and packaging

This section could use a music sample, consider moving the sample of "Emo" to this section.
On the same note, the description of the song has a great quote from Rolling Stone, but it does not say very much about the sound of the song itself or why a sample is needed. It would be good to add more about the song's musical style in the description.
"kicked out of Poway High School for showing up to a basketball game drunk" --> "kicked out of Poway High School for showing up to a basketball game while intoxicated"
"The original Star Wars trilogy were popular during Hoppus' childhood into the late 1970s and early 1980s, and reflected a new interest in the late 1990s when the series was re-released in theaters." --> "The original Star Wars trilogy were popular during Hoppus' childhood into the late 1970s and early 1980s, and a theater re-release in the late 1990s reinvigorated interest in the series."
"DeLonge recalled in 2012 that the only thing "bad" about Dude Ranch" --> "DeLonge recalled in 2012 that the only "bad" aspect about Dude Ranch"

Release

"Although it didn't have the impact of "Dammit", it hardly mattered as the former was still receiving heavy play on radio and TV stations across the nation." It "hardly mattered" to who? I think it would be better to use a direct quote here.
"Unreleased Dude Ranch cut "I Won't Be Home for Christmas"" Begin the sentence with "The unreleased Dude Ranch cut" Also, "[[I Won't ]Be Home for Christmas]]" should be unlinked here as it is linked earlier in the article.

Reception

This section could use a table of the critical review scores, like the one in Enema of the State

Touring

"the trio grew tired of other commitments: interviews and TV appearances due to the success of "Dammit (Growing Up)"." --> "the trio grew tired of other commitments including interviews and TV appearances due to the success of "Dammit (Growing Up)"."
"Barker famously learned the drum tracks for the band's set in only 45 minutes prior to his first show" "famously" sounds a bit like an opinion. Is there a quote about this?
"Following a largely successful Australian tour in the spring, Hoppus and DeLonge presented an ultimatum: quit drinking or go to an in-patient rehab, which Raynor agreed to." To which of these did he agree? Also, reword "which Raynor agreed to" to "to which Raynor agreed".

On hold

I have placed the review on hold now for these small concerns to be addressed. This was a very interesting article and I greatly enjoyed reading it. Good luck! Basilisk4u (talk) 19:23, 4 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]