Talk:Don Kindt/GA1

GA Review

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: Puffin (talk · contribs) 13:21, 13 April 2012 (UTC)

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	Some grammar is incorrect. You are supposed to use the word "a" before a consonant (for example a bear, a cat) and the word "an" before a vowel (for example an apple, an orange). There are a few mistakes with this in the article where you use "an" instead of "a". "Considered to be an defensive standout during his playing career" should be "Considered to be a defensive standout during his playing career" "Kindt received an scholarship to the University of Wisconsin." should be: "Kindt received a scholarship to the University of Wisconsin." "He missed the next two games due to an leg infection" should be "He missed the next two games due to a leg infection" "Kindt suffered an left knee injury" should be "Kindt suffered a left knee injury" "The Badgers finished the season with an 3-4-2 record." should be "The Badgers finished the season with a 3-4-2 record." "An highlight of the season happened against" should be "A highlight of the season happened against" "After running for 118 yards on 41 carries for an 2.9 yards per carry" should be "After running for 118 yards on 41 carries for a 2.9 yards per carry" "Kindt was an starter at defensive back for most of his career" should be "Kindt was a starter at defensive back for most of his career" "where he scored an safety after tackling Cleveland Browns quarterback Otto Graham during the second quarter." should be "where he scored a safety after tackling Cleveland Browns quarterback Otto Graham during the second quarter" "four touchdowns while as an receiver" should be "four touchdowns while as a receiver" "As an running back, Kindt had 172 carries for 586 yards and four touchdowns" should be "As a running back, Kindt had 172 carries for 586 yards and four touchdowns" Kindt became an "hero of the game" could be "Kindt became a "hero of the game"" or "Kindt became the "hero of the game"" "Hawkeyes to score an safety with time expiring when he did" should be "Hawkeyes to score a safety with time expiring when he did" "The next game, an 27-21 loss against" should be "The next game, a 27-21 loss against" These need to be fixed within the article. I would suggest wiki linking words such as "freshman" and "blowouts" as people not from the United States may not be familiar with these terms. You have wiki linked "yards per carry", but it is a red link, is it supposed to lead to another article? "He became the starter at right halfback" I don't quite understand this, do you mean he started as a right half back? "In Kindt return to the squad," do you mean when Kindt returned to the squad? "One of his touchdowns was a meaningless three yard run" why was it meaningless?
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.	FN 6: ("Last-Minute Field Goal Win For Camp Grant") Needs page number. FN 30: ("Kindt Drills 30 Grads for Badger Game") Needs page number.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).	The following statements in the article are likely to be challenged and do not provide an inline citation: "The Badgers finished the season with an 3-4-2 record." "After starting in a dual offensive/defensive role, Kindt decided to focus on playing only as an defensive back for the last few seasons of his career." "In his final six seasons, he only carried the ball 16 times for 13 yards and no touchdowns."
	2c. it contains no original research.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
	7. Overall assessment.	Y Pass. Well done. Puffin Let's talk! 17:13, 14 April 2012 (UTC)

• Fixed all the concerns, let me know if there's anything else. Thanks Secret ^account 16:54, 14 April 2012 (UTC)