Talk:Don Blasingame/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 12:05, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

"He made his debut for the team in September of 1955" - the date should be written as September 1955 per MOS:DATESNO
"He made it to the World Series with the Reds his first year" - can be changed to say either during his first year or in his first year
"he lost the second base job to Pete Rose" - how about if the word in bold is changed to role for variety?
"he served as a minor league coordinator for the Philadelphia Phillies after that." - afterward.

"but he went off to serve in the United States Army for a couple years during the Korean War." - please state how many years exactly that Blasingame spent in the U.S. Army
"During his offseasons in 1953 and 1954, Blasingame attended David Lipscomb College in Nashville, Tennessee." - think this sentence should be further rewritten to pass WP:LIMITED

"Next season, he went to spring training with the Buffaloes." - For the following season,
"He suffered a couple injuries in spring training," - should that he changed to say suffered two injuries
"the nickname would follow him the rest of his career." - him for the
"earning a September call-up to the big league Cardinals." - try not to use the term "big league" as it is informal

"Then, June 14," - on June 14,
"His first home run finally came May 12," - better; His first home run eventually came on May 12,
"Another highlight came June 12 that year," - came on June 12
"getting named to the named to the National League All-Star team for the only time in his career." - getting named to the
"August 6, he had four hits and two RBI in an 8-7 victory over the San Francisco Giants." - how about He had four hits and two RBI in an 8–7 victory over San Francisco Giants on August 6.?
Wikilink Sports Illustrated
"and drove in two runs June 9 in a 12-3 victory over Milwaukee." - during a June 9 12–3 victory over Milwaukee.
"also against Milwaukee." - over for variety

"He was only used three times in the first couple of weeks," - please state the exact number of weeks exactly
"May 24, he had four hits," - On May 24,
"over them in Game 1 of a doubleheader September 5." - doubleheader held on September 5.

"April 14, 1965, Blasingame had a two-RBI triple against Dick Radatz" - On April 14, 1965,
"Following September call-ups," - Following a series of call-ups in September,
- I adjusted this slightly differently and linked it for explanation. In baseball, the major league rosters expand September 1, allowing teams to add prospects they think might be full-time players next year. I wanted to show that Blasingame was released just after this phenomenon. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 18:26, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"the Athletics released him September 7." - released him on September 7.

"giving up a double to Blasingame in a 1-0 Yankee win" - how about changing the word in bold to relinquishing for variety?

"Blasingame four times finished in the Top 10 in the NL in steals" - the text in bold can be moved to the end of this statement since it is more gramatically correct
"(a stat that attempts to predict how many more wins a team would have because of the fielding of one of its players)" - statstic

"“We ran over obstacle courses for a week - the pair of quotation marks highlighted in bold are unneeded
"However, the trade netted Hanshin" - more formal; earned
- Hope you don't mind; I think brought might make more sense in a trade context Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 18:29, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"His managerial record was 180-208-28 (Japanese baseball allows for ties).[1][4][3]" - refs in numerical order please

Wikilink old-timer's games to Old-Timers' Day
"he moved to the Scottsdale, Arizona area." - please limit the linking to one per MOS:SEAOFBLUE
Link Mississippi Sports Hall of Fame

"Kent played minor league baseball for three seasons, including a couple in the Phillies' organization." - please state where possible how many seasons exactly
"the family split the year living there and in the United States." - divided

Reference 3 is missing Associated Press as the agency that provided the story
References 20 and 60 are missing the page numbers that the respective stories can be found on
Reference 47 is dead and requires archiving
The same reference is missing the date it was published and the author who wrote it

Will be putting the review on hold to allow the nominator to action/respond to the queries raised above. MWright96 (talk) 15:36, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Sanfranciscogiants17: Now promoting to GA class. I have added the missing the page numbers to two of the contemporary newspaper references that did not have them mentioned in this entry before. MWright96 (talk) 19:13, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]