Talk:Don't Wanna Go Home/GA1

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Reviewer: AJona1992 (talk · contribs) 01:05, 20 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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This sentence in the lead reads ""Don't Wanna Go Home" is a song recorded by American recording artist Jason Derülo. It was released as the lead single from his second studio album, Future History on May 20, 2011." however, what year was Future History released? (2011)? Also why is American wikilink per WP:COMMONWORD? Also, who released it? (recording company needed) Look at Vision of Love for an example. Done
Also from the lead "and became a top-twenty hit" sounds POV-ish Reworded
Also from the lead "In the United Kingdom, "Don't Wanna Go Home" debuted at number one on the UK Singles Chart, and became Derülo's second number-one single in that country, following "In My Head" (2010)." Should be written like so "In the United Kingdom, "Don't Wanna Go Home" debuted at number one on the UK Singles Chart, and became Derülo's second consecutive number-one single in that country, following "In My Head" (2010)." Done
In "Background and composition" this sentence reads: "On May 3, 2011, a 34-second preview of the song premiered online and is cover art was also unveiled." There is a word that needs to be replaced to make this sentence work. Done
Also from the same section ""Don't Wanna Go Home" was sent to contemporary hit radio in the United States on May 10" --> ""Don't Wanna Go Home" was sent to contemporary hit radios in the United States on May 10" or ""Don't Wanna Go Home" was sent to contemporary hit radio stations in the United States on May 10" or likewise. Done
Oh noo... This sentence "Speaking about the song, Derülo told MTV News that he "wanted to write a song that people could escape their problems, their pain, their turmoil, and by doing a feel-good song, I'm doing just that. You don't have to write a song about saving the world to do just that." borders the extreme WP:WEASELWORDS Done
File:Don'tWannaGoHome.ogg fails WP:NFCC. You must state how this sample gives readers an understanding of the song and why it justifies WP:NFCC. Look at Amor Prohibido (song)#Music, theme and lyrics for an example. The rational for the sample needs a "further reasoning" rational. Take a look at File:Amor Prohibido.ogg (additional rational) for an example. Done
In "Chart performance" this sentence is just lousily "On the issue dated May 28, 2011," (edit) please remove all instances of "On the issue date [date] ..." - needs a variety and also does not sound right. Done
"for selling more than 500,000 copies" NO, RIAA gives certifications for SHIPMENTS, "for shipments of 500,000 copies" Done
"while a giant screen projecting his name in gold glittery letters was shown on the stage backdrop." - is this even necessary? Why do readers need to know that there was a gold glittery letters during his performance? Removed
FN#1 "[Booklet]" needs to be "[CD]". Also, a catalog number (publisherid) and page numbers are recommended. Done
FN#4 (United States) needs to be removed Done
FN#14 publisher? Source doesn't say. Oz ^talk 03:15, 20 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
FN#15 why is The Huffington Post italicized if its an online website? Done
FN#25 needs to be written like the way you did with FN#21 Done
What makes this a reliable source? Many GAs use Amazon for CD formats. If Amazon isn't reliable then why is iTunes? Oz ^talk 03:15, 20 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Please read this for more information. Best, Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 13:22, 20 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I've removed the source. Oz ^talk 07:06, 22 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
FN#45 (United Kingdom) needs to be removed, also if you are going to spell the proper way to write his name please do so for all source titles. Done
FN#52 do not CAPITALIZE titles Done
FN#57, FN#58 and FN#59 "Billboard.biz" --> "Billboard" Done
FN#61, FN#62, FN#63, FN#64, FN#65, FN#66, FN#67, FN#68, FN#69, FN#70, FN#71 and FN#72 remove countries. Done

Please address the following issues. Best, Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 01:05, 20 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry for the long wait. Passing GA happy holidays, Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 18:40, 26 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

That's okay. Thanks. Oz ^talk 22:59, 26 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]