Talk:Don't Take the Money/GA1

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 13:35, 6 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Will grab for a review if that is okay with you. Will get to it by the middle of the week. Aoba47 (talk) 13:35, 6 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Lead and infobox

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For this part (as the album's first lead single), remove “first” as the phrase “lead single” already lets the reader know that this is the first single from the album.
I have two comments about this sentence ( "Don't Take the Money" is a pop and synth-pop song with influences of 1980s music). I would say “influences from” rather than “influences of” as the current wording sounds like a little off to me. I am also not certain about the value of the wikilink for 1980s music as it is somewhat vague and I am not sure how it would help the reader. There was a lot of different types and genres of music releases in the 1980s, and I am assuming that this song does not take inspiration from all of them. I think the wikilinks to the genres should be enough to help the reader understand the song’s sound and direction.
I have been told in the past that the “music critics” wikilink is not necessary, though I will leave them up to your discretion as I do not have a strong opinion either way. I can understand both sides of the argument on its use.
For this part (An accompanying music video for the song), I do not believe that “for the song” is necessary, as it can be assumed from the context.
You only mention one live performance in the lead, though the “Live performances” section mentions more. If I was just reading the lead, I would have assumed that he only performed the song that one time. I would add something to clarify that he performed it multiple time.
For the infobox, do you think that you should make a note that Ella Yelich-O’Connor is Lorde’s real name to prevent any confusion from an unfamiliar reader?

Background and composition

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The wikilink for “Bleachers” goes to the article on actual bleachers as opposed to the act.
For this part ("Don't Take the Money" was co-written by Jack Antonoff, the sole member of Bleachers and New Zealand singer), there should be a comma after “Bleachers” to close off that phrase.
For this sentence (The track was inspired by Lena Dunham, Antonoff's girlfriend at the time of the song's release.), I think you can remove “of the song’s release” as it would be clear from the context.
Again, I do not think the wikilink for “1980s music” is particularly helpful so I would remove it.

Promotion and reception

I am uncertain about the use of “Promotion” in the section title as the first paragraph seems to deal more so with the song’s release. Maybe retitle it “Release and reception”, as promotion would also include the music video and live performances, which are covered in different sections.
Again, the use of the “music critics” wikilink is up to you.

Music video

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Unlink “Lena Dunham” as you have already linked her in a previous section.
Cut this part (Antonoff's girlfriend at the time of the video's release.) as you already said that Dunham and Antonoff were dating around this time period.

Live performances

Everything looks good here.

Credits and personnel

I believe that an article on a song is required to have this type of section if this information is available. Since this song was released as part of an album, I am assuming that it can be found in some sort of liner notes.

Final comments

You have done a wonderful job with the article. I honestly have never heard of this song until reading the article, so it was interesting and informative. My comments are relatively minor, and I will be more than happy to promote this as a good article once they are addressed. Have a great start to your week. Aoba47 (talk) 14:48, 7 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Aoba47: Just went ahead and fixed the article. I placed a note on Lorde's credited name in the background section and removed the bit about the MTV Unplugged session with a statement mentioning Antonoff's multiple television performances. Thank you so much for reviewing this article! De88 (talk) 20:52, 7 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Verdict

Thank you for addressing everything. I will ✓ Pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 00:42, 8 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]