Talk:Don't Kill It/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 10:49, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"attached to direct for over three to four years" I'm afraid I'm not sure I understand that, and "over three to four years" is very odd phrasing.
" budgeting concerns. The budget " quick repeat of budget is reptitive.
"$1 million; with" no need for that semi-colon at all.
"had one to two weeks notice." one-to-two
"postponed on two separate occasions," -> "postponed twice"
" in Hamburg, Germany on " comma after Germany.
"at the Fantastic Fest film festival in" -> "at Fantastic Fest in"
" March 3, 2017 via AMC Theatres.[1][2] " comma after 2017 and why is this the only place to use refs? No need assuming this info is in the article and referenced there.
Plot is too long. Our MOS recommends between 400 and 700 words, this is currently at nearly 1000.
"to "a happy accident."" ref quote and I don't understand what this means.
"Mendez'" ->"Mendez's"
"project.[11][10] " ref order.
Quotes need referencing and when unclear, attribution too.
" Jebediah Woodley; his debut in the horror movie" comma, not semi-colon.
"Dolph Lundgren in 2015," image caption is fragment so no full stop required.
" role "probably" 9–10 months" why "probably"? The lead doesn't say "probably"?
"time, but "had it all down"; production " the first part of this is really unnecessary, one would imagine that all professional actors "have it down" before filming. The second part should be a sentence in its own right however, not another semi-colon run-on.
"and "maybe a week or two" before " I don't think these kind of quotes are really necessary or enhancing the article. This could be "and about two weeks" in plain prose.
"filming; at which point she was cast." no need for semi-colon.
" at which point she was cast. This was due to all of the producers disagreeing on who they wanted to play the" odd order. The delay was because of a failure to agree, not the point at which she was cast.
" December, 2015" no need for the comma.
"in Lexington, Mississippi;[17][10] over " order, no need for semi-colon, it's a comma.
"12 days to prep" " again, no quote necessary, just "12 days to prepare" in plain prose is fine.
""20 miles out." [N 3] " ref quote and no space before note.
" helpful; and provided the production crew with access to different locations; including t" no need for either semi-colon, lose the first and replace the second with a comma.
"Mendez on the filming of Don't Kill It.[11]" fragment, lose the full stop. Same for other box quote.
"during which time " at which time, it's a single day.
"would "launch sales" at the" another unnecessary quote.
Could link Limited theatrical release.
Avoid single-sentence paragraphs.
"Richard Whittaker, of The Austin Chronicle" lose the comma.
Use the {{'}} template for 's after words in italics to prevent the apostrophe crashing.
"surface, Don’t Kill It has" italics for film title.
"of 92%; based on " delete semi-colon.
Again, avoid single-sentence paras.
No need to link DIY, I think most readers understand it.
Likewise Halloween.
"Noel Murray, of the " remove comma. Several of these.
" "enjoyable comedic wit"; although "nothing Oscar worthy, it carries Lundgren "a lot farther than you'd expect".[30]" lose the semi-colon and there's an odd number of quote marks here.
"Distribution.[32][33][34][6][20]" five (out of order) citations really needed for this single sentence?

That's it for a first pass, so it's on hold. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 10:42, 3 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

User:Metal121 I'll give this a week before failing it if no response is forthcoming. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 20:39, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Failing due to lack of response. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 10:45, 10 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]