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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 11:40, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
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Appropriate for me to review this since not only have we collaborated before, but the GA backlog is going on right now! --K. Peake 11:40, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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  • Recording date is unsourced in the body
  •  Done removed
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  •  Done, changed per WP:NOEXEC (Ron Fair needed removing)
  •  Done changed
  • "It is an extension of their second studio album" → "The EP is an extension of the group's second studio album,"
  •  Done, changed
  • "previously released singles including" → "previously released singles, such as" with the appropriate target
  •  Done, changed
  • Remove the noting of Missy Elliot's feature as this is trivial for the lead
  •  Done, removed
  •  Done, changed
  • "The Mini Collection was one of" → "The former was one of"
  •  Not done, the existing text is clearer. Suggested text is unclear and confusing
  • "era and was released in" → "era, being released in"
  •  Done, changed
  • "legs of their" → "legs of the group's"
  •  Done, changed
  • "Upon release, the EP debuted at number nine in on" → "The EP debuted at number nine on" and this should be moved to being the last sentence of the second paragraph instead
  •  Not done, in context of the rest of the lead it doesn't make sense as the second and third paragraph flow together. I would normally agree otherwise.
  •  Done, changed
  •  Not done, no need to change this. Given that its a limited/special release and was region-linked its significant to include sales.
  • "remake of the original" → "remake of A. R. Rahman's original" with the appropriate wikilink
  •  Done, changed
  •  Done, changed
  • "several charts worldwide including" → "several charts worldwide, including"
  •  Done, changed
  • "number three in UK" → "number three in the UK." since the Hot 100 position is too low to be notable here
  •  Done, kept Billboard Hot 100 as they're US artists and fifteen is hardly "not notable".
  •  Done, changed
  • "second single and is a" → "second single, which is a"
  •  Done, changed
  • "peaking in the top ten on" → "peaking in the top 10 of"
  •  Done, changed
  • "Australia but in the UK it peaked at number 17 and in the US at number 73." → "Australia, though it reached number 17 in the UK and number 73 in the United States."
  •  Done, changed
  • "Both songs attracted controversy" → ""Jai Ho! (You Are My Destiny)" and "Hush Hush; Hush Hush" both attracted controversy"
  •  Done, changed
  •  Done, changed
  • "from the group's second" → "from the Pussycat Dolls' second"
  •  Done, changed
  • "The release would mark" → "The release of the latter marked"
  •  Done, changed
  • "and a hiatus was for when" → "and a hiatus started when"
  •  Done, changed
  • "one by one the members of the group announced their departures" → "the members of the group announced their departures one by one,"
  •  Done, changed
  • "eventual disbandment of The Pussycat Dolls." → "eventual disbandment of the Pussycat Dolls by 2010."
  •  Done, changed
  • "the group's final album and single respectively," → "the group's final album and single releases, respectively,"
  •  Done, changed
  • "the group decided to reunite in 2019, and the release of a" → "they decided to reunite in 2019, going on to release the"

Background and release

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  • "confirmed that the group" → "confirmed that the Pussycat Dolls"
  •  Done, changed
  •  Done, changed
  •  Done, changed
  • "He called Doll Domination" → "He called the album"
  •  Done, changed
  • "had sold 400,000 copies" → "had sold less than 400,000 copies"
  •  Done, changed
  • "was on the way called" → "was set to be released under the title of"
  •  Done, changed
  • "In comparison, the group's first album..." this sentence is not only incorrect because that article is from 2008, but it also off topic since there is no mention of Doll Domination in that article whatsoever
  • Not sure what you mean, this sentence is about the previous album, serving as a comparison between the sales of PCD versus Doll Domination.
  • I am aware it is used to compare the sales of the two albums, but this is trivial since the source about PCD not only offers no mention of the other album, but it is from a different period in time. --K. Peake 07:44, 5 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "During the interview with Graff, Scherzinger explained that" → "Scherzinger explained to Graff that"
  •  Done, changed
  • [1] should solely be at the end of the para now, since [2] is no longer used here
  • See comment above about not being sure about the removal of said content
  • "several reissues of the Doll Domination followed including" → "several reissues of Doll Domination were released, including"
  •  Done, changed
  • "The Mini Collection a six-track" → "The Mini Collection, which is a six-track"
  • Remove wikilink on extended play
  •  Done, changed
  • "within Europe." → "across Europe."
  •  Done, changed
  • "A second EP was also" → "A second EP for the album was also"
  •  Done, changed
  • "in Germany called Doll Domination – Re-edition EP which" → "in Germany entitled Doll Domination – Re-edition EP; it"
  •  Done, changed
  •  Done, changed
  •  Done, changed
  • "It also uses" → "The EP also uses"
  •  Done, changed
  • "All of the releases" → "All of the releases for the album"
  •  Done, changed
  • "of the group's then most recent single" → "of the Pussycat Dolls' then-most recent single"
  • Add release year of the single in brackets
  •  Done, changed
  • "new song "Painted Windows" and" → "their new song "Painted Windows", and"
  •  Done, changed
  • "which was taken from the original release" → "that was included on the original release"
  •  Done, changed

Music and lyrics

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  • "and during their support act" → "and appearing as a support act" on the img main text
  •  Done changed
  • Remove wikilink on extended play
  •  Done changed
  • "is 26 minutes and 3 seconds long," → "has a length of 26 minutes and 3 seconds,"
  •  Done changed
  • "from the group's 2008 album, Doll Domination." → "from Doll Domination."
  •  Done changed
  • "It was released on" → "The former was released on"
  •  Done changed
  • "and includes the group's then most recent single" → "and includes"
  •  Done changed
  • Remove wikilink on "Jai Ho! (You Are My Destiny)"
  •  Not done, its fine to link things once in each section
  • "a new song "Painted Windows" and" → ""Painted Windows", and the remix song"
  •  Done changed
  • Remove wikilink on "Hush Hush; Hush Hush"
  •  Not done, see previous comment
  • "a remix of the group's..." remove since like the above, it is repeated from the previous section
  •  Not done, see previous comment
  • "comprises previously released singles," → "comprises the group's 2008 singles"
  •  Done changed
  • "The EP was preceded" → "The Mini Collection was preceded"
  •  Done changed
  • "the release of a" → "the single release of a"
  •  Done changed
  • ""Jai Ho! (You Are My Destiny)" which is" → ""Jai Ho! (You Are My Destiny)", which is"
  •  Done changed
  • "which is taken from the" → "that was included on the"
  •  Done changed
  • "how the song came about, one of the song's writers," → "how the song was created, co-writer"
  •  Done changed
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  • "Once all interpretations" → "He recalled that once all interpretations"
  •  Done changed
  •  Done changed
  • "while Scherzinger and A.R. Rahman corresponded via webcam." → "with Scherzinger and A.R. Rahman corresponding via webcam." with the wikilink
  •  Done changed
  • "replaces the original tune's" → "replaces the original's"
  •  Done changed
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  • "the lyrics as" → "described the lyrics as"
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  • "by Indian poet Gulzar."" → "by Indian poet Gulzar"." for consistency
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  • "and heavily using of" → "alongside heavy usage of"
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  • "originally written for with Spears in mind" → "originally written with Spears in mind"
  •  Done changed
  • "was rejected by Spears' label" → "was rejected by her record label" with the wikilink
  •  Done changed
  • "at the time of creating Spears'" → "at the time of the creation of Spears'"
  •  Done changed
  • "her own debut album before" → "her own debut studio album, before"
  •  Done changed
  • "When the song was given" → "Once "When I Grow Up" was given"
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  • "Mike "Handz" Donaldson and" → "Mike "Handz" Donaldson, and"
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  • "and was mixed by" → "while mixed by" with the target
  •  Done changed
  • "at Chalice Studios in Los Angeles." → "at Chalice Studios."
  •  Done changed
  • "credits for the song, for its sample" → "credits on the song, as a result of its sample" with the target
  •  Done changed
  • "It was described by" → "The song was described by"
  •  Done changed
  • "as the album's ideological centrepiece." → "as the EP's ideological centrepiece." with the wikilink
  •  Not done - source is describing the song as in context of the album not the EP
  • "In writing for the paper," → "Writing for the newspaper,"
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  • "Randy Lewis said" → "Randy Lewis said,"
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  • "and the Dolls’ smug" → "and the Dolls' smug"
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  • "were picked up by" → "were noticed by"
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  • "atop a melody of chants and" → "over a melody of chants,"
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  • [20][15][21] should be put in numerical order
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  • "noted that the group sounded" → "noted that they sounded"
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  • "features guest verses" → "features guest verses from"
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  • "of "Je M'appelle Jane" written" → "of "Je M'appelle Jane", written"
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  • "Meanwhile "Painted Windows" reunited the group" → "Meanwhile, "Painted Windows" reunited the Pussycat Dolls"
  •  Done changed
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  • Rap-Up should be italicised
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  • "in the album booklet." → "in the booklet for The Mini Collection."
  •  Done changed
  • Remove wikilink on "I Hate This Part"
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  • "and Mich Hansen and produced by the latter two" → "and Mich Hansen, while produced by the latter of the two"
  •  Done changed
  • "Ron Fair and Scherzinger who also served" → "Fair and Scherzinger, with Fair also serving
  •  Done changed
  • Remove wikilink on Denmark
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  • "with the assistance from" → "with the assistance of"
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  • Remove target on mixed
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  • Remove wikilink on instrumentation
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  • Remove target on English
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  • Remove target on American
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  • "ballad with influences of R&B" → "ballad, with influences of R&B" with the target
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  • "solo debut album Her Name Is Nicole which" → "debut studio album Her Name Is Nicole, which"
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  • Remove wikilink on "Hush Hush; Hush Hush"
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  • "of the Doll Domination song "Hush Hush"." → "of "Hush Hush"."
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  • "for the interpolation" → "due to the interpolation"
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  • "Quiz & Larossi while Scherzinger" → "Quiz & Larossi, while Scherzinger"

Singles

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  • Remove wikilink on "Jai Ho! (You Are My Destiny)"
  •  Not done - there's no issue with linking to things once in each new section
  • Remove target on soundtrack
  •  Not done - there's no issue with linking to things once in each new section
  • "on March 13 which was" → "on March 13 of that year, which was"
  •  Done
  • Remove wikilink on Austria
  •  Done
  • "The group recreate" → "the group recreate"
  •  Done
  • Remove wikilink on Slumdog Millionaire
  •  Not done - there's no issue with linking to things once in each new section
  • "around the world including" → "around the world, including"
  •  Done
  • "native country of the United States." → "native country of the US."
  •  Done
  • "at number three and as of 2017, had sold" → "at number three on the UK Singles Charts and as of 2017, it has sold"
  •  Done
  • "to become the group's second" → "to become the Pussycatt Dolls' second"
  •  Done
  • "selling single in the territory behind" → "selling single in the UK, behind"
  •  Done
  • "The single was included" → "The song was included"
  •  Done
  • "part of their set list" → "part of the group's set list"
  •  Done
  •  Not done - there's no issue with linking to things once in each new section
  •  Done
  • "on the set list the group's own" → "on the set list for the former's"
  •  Not done - reads awkwardly
  • Remove wikilink on "Hush Hush; Hush Hush"
  •  Not done - there's no issue with linking to things once in each new section
  • "of the Doll Domination album track "Hush Hush"." → "of "Hush Hush"."
  •  Done - changed
  • "to be released on April 28 with" → "to be released on April 28, 2009, with"
  •  Done - changed
  • "featured artist,[42]" → "featured artist;[42] this led to"
  •  Done - changed
  • "just like their..." remove this since it is not backed up by any sources
  •  Done - changed
  • "The official music video premiered" → "The song's music video premiered"
  •  Done - changed
  • "peaked in the top ten" → "peaked in the top 10"
 Not done, not required per MOS:NUMERAL
  • "including number four" → "including number 4" per MOS:NUM
 Not done, not correct per MOS:NUMERAL, which says "Integers from zero to nine are spelled out in words."
  • "number five in" → "number 5 in"
 Not done, not correct per MOS:NUMERAL, which says "Integers from zero to nine are spelled out in words."
  • "number six in" → "number 6 in"
 Not done, not correct per MOS:NUMERAL, which says "Integers from zero to nine are spelled out in words."
  • "number ten in" → "number 10 in"
 Not done, not correct per MOS:NUMERAL, which says "Integers from zero to nine are spelled out in words." ≫ Lil-Unique1 -{ Talk }- 09:49, 15 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Reception and impact

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Critical reception

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  • Remove the ratings box since it is only one review and already written in prose that it was four stars
  •  Done
  • "Nick Levine siad that "at" → "Nick Levine said of The Mini Collection that "at"
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  • "little strange" suggesting" → "little strange", suggesting"
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  • "track by track so" → "track by track, so"
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  • "to assemble a six track mini album" → "to assemble the EP"

Legacy

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  • The info about "Jai Ho! (You Are My Destiny)" does not appear to be backed up at all
I followed the principles of WP:CITE, its a fact that "Jai Ho!" features Nicole Scherzinger. its in the single listings, the cover art etc. This doesn't need sourcing?
  • "...follow up single "Hush Hush; Hush Hush" also initially listed the singer" → ""Hush Hush; Hush Hush" initially listed Scherzinger"
  •  Done
  • Remove wikilink on The Circus Starring Britney Spears
  • See previous comments about linking
  •  Done
  • "during their break saying," → "during the break, saying,"
  •  Done
  • "let me give" → "[l]et me give"
  •  Done
  • "not featured" referring" → "not featured", referring"
  •  Done
  • "of the singles," → "of the single," unless you can source it for the other single
  •  Not done, the two singles "Jai Ho!" and "Hush Hush; Hush Hush" are being talked about
  • "them, ever."" → "them, ever"."
  •  Done
  • "later referred about her" → "later spoke about her"
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  • "during a radio interview. "It's" → "during a radio interview: "It's"
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  • "Hush Hush; Hush Hush" needs speech marks
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  • Remove target on digital download
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  • "confirmation from group's founder" → "confirmation from group founder"
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  • "confirming by that new members" → "that new members"
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  • "became the groups' least releases until 2019 when the group" → "became the group's last releases, until in 2019 when they"
  •  Done
  • "taking part in the reunion," → "taking part in the reunion;"
  •  Done
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  • "the group released a new single" → "the Pussycat Dolls released their new single"

Track listing

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  • There is no source here; add the credits one at the top of the section
  •  Done
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  • The Writing Camp and Brick & Lace should both only be targeted to on the first mention of the members here
  • Not sure what you mean, but its standard practice to link each member of the group
  •  Done
  • Target Theron Thomas to R. City and remove target on Timothy Thomas
  •  Done
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  • Remove target to Quiz & Larossi for Josef Larossi
  • See previous comment
  • Notes and samples should be subheadings, not subsections
  •  Done
  • "He's Always There" as written by Jim McCarty and Paul Samwell-Smith performed → "He's Always There", as written by Jim McCarty and Paul Samwell-Smith, and performed
  •  Done
  • "Je M'appelle Jane" as written by Mickael Furnon performed → "Je M'appelle Jane", as written by Mickael Furnon and performed
  •  Done
  • "I Will Survive" as written by Freddie Perren and Dino Fekaris and → "I Will Survive", as written by Freddie Perren and Dino Fekaris, and an
  •  Done
  • by David Blumberg performed → by David Blumberg, as performed

Personnel and credits

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  • Retitle to Credits and personnel
  •  Done
  • The imgs here are not needed, since it is not required for pics of so many musicians
  •  Not done, there's no set standard for what can and can't be done and its unusual for us to be able to have images for all of the personnel involved. I see no issue with this.
  • You should not have these tables; lay it out like most credits and personnel sections plus instead put (track...) for people's credits with the numbers in the brackets rather than separate tracks

Commercial and chart performance

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  • The para here should be in a separate section titled Commercial performance and move it to being directly before the track listing
  •  Done
  • "In the United Kingdom," → "In the UK,"
  •  Done
  • "debuted at number 9" → "debuted at number nine"
  •  Done
  •  Done
  • "This is less than" → "This was less than"
  •  Done
  • "the group's debut album" → "the group's debut studio album"
  •  Done
  • "70,000 copies[62] and was certified silver" → "70,000 copies in the UK." moving [62] to the end of the sentence and remove [63], since it was later certified gold so silver is non-notable
  •  Done

Charts

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  • This should be its own section and come straight after credits and personnel
  •  Done
  •  Done

Certifications

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  • Should be its own section and come directly after charts
  •  Done
  • See MOS:TABLECAPTION
  •  Done
  • The bottom of the table is incorrect

Release history

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References

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  • Copyvio score looks fine at 36.3%
  • Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
  • Solely cite MTV News as publisher instead for ref 2
  •  Done
  • iTunes (AU) → iTunes Store (AU) on ref 5 with the wikilink
  •  Done
  • WP:OVERLINK of Amazon on refs 6, 7, 42, 68, 69, 70 and 71
  •  Done
  • Solely cite MTV News as publisher instead for refs 11, 14, 17, 50, 52, 54 and 55 with no wikilink
  •  Done
  •  Done
  •  Done
  •  Done
  • Remove Billboard as the author from ref 20
  •  Done
  • WP:OVERLINK of Digital Spy on refs 21, 27 and 58 and always cite as publisher on all refs including 56
  •  Done
  • Cite Rap-Up as work/website instead for ref 24
  •  Done
  • Cite Digital Spy as publisher for ref 29
  •  Done
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  • Cite Rap-Up as work/website instead for refs 32 and 44, with no wikilink
  •  Done
  • Remove the work/website from ref 33 and target ARIA Top 50 to ARIA Charts
  •  Done
  • Remove work/website from refs 34, 35, 36, 37, 47
  •  Done
  • Remove ref 37's Media Forest publisher
  •  Done
  • WP:OVERLINK of Billboard on ref 38
  •  Done
  • Is ref 40 really reliable?
  •  Done - replaced
  •  Done
  • WP:OVERLINK of Musiikkituottajat on ref 47
  •  Done
  • WP:OVERLINK of ARIA Top 50 on ref 49
  •  Done
  • WP:OVERLINK of The Pussycat Dolls on ref 60
  •  Done
  • Delete the publisher from refs 61 and 62
  •  Not done, this is the album chart template. can't change that
  • WP:OVERLINK of Music Week on ref 62

Final comments and verdict

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