Talk:Disease X/GA1

GA Review

Nomination successful --DannyS712 (talk) 22:33, 20 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: DannyS712 (talk · contribs) 03:26, 19 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Review

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Notes

Currently falls under general sanctions as part of Wikipedia:General sanctions/Coronavirus disease 2019. Will need to evaluate stability criteria in more detail --DannyS712 (talk) 03:29, 19 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
No recent pattern of rollbacks or undos, no heated discussions on talk but generally looks stable DannyS712 (talk) 03:36, 19 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Lede: The rationale was to ensure - rationale for what? Suggest "The rationale for adopting the placeholder name" or "The WHO adopted the placeholder name to"
- Done, used the latter version.
#Rationale: to stop the outbreaks turning into - "stop the outbreaks from turning into"
- Done
#Rationale: The Disease X placeholder acknowledged the potential for a future epidemic that could be caused by an unknown pathogen, and to ensure WHO's planning and capabilities were flexible enough to adapt to such an event. - not sure what the second half is supposed to mean - its addition was to ensure...?
- Done, changed to ,and by its inclusion, challenged the WHO to ensure their planning and capabilities ...?
#Rationale: At the announcement - what announcement?
- Done, changed to At the 2018 announcement of the updated shortlist of blueprint priority diseases,
#Rationale: the WHO said "..., and Arne Røttingen, of the R&D Blueprint Special Advisory Group, said: "... - suggest using a consistent approach for the similar introductions in terms of whether to use a colon or not (applies elsewhere in that paragraph as well)
- Done, fixed to a colon throughout
#Adoption: In the first sentence, and that is a bit confusing, since the first quote has no "that" - perhaps replace it with just "saying"?
- Done
#H7N9 (2018): China would not share samples of the new H7N9 strain, however, they eventually brought the outbreak under control and the urgency dissipated. - "however..." is a separate clause, and joining it with a comma is confusing since however is also followed by a comma. Suggest "strain. However,"
- Done
#Synthetic viruses / bioweapons: On the announcement - what announcement?
- Done, changed to At the 2018 announcement of the updated shortlist of blueprint priority diseases,
#Synthetic viruses / bioweapons: media speculation included the idea that it could be created intentionally - what is "it"?
- Done, changed to the media speculated that a future Disease X could be created intentionally
#Synthetic viruses / bioweapons: Røttingen felt it was less likely but cautioned - I would generally be cautious when ascribing feelings, but, even if it is proper to do so, less is a comparison - less likely than what?
- Done, fiwed this whole phrase to Røttingen said that while it was unlikely that a future Disease X would originate from a bio-weapon, he cautioned by saying,
#In popular culture: Can examples of some of the books be given?
- Done, added the titles of two examples in the text.
Image caption: Marion Koopmans, WHO R&D Blueprint Special Advisory Group - "member of the"? Jeremy Farrar's caption says chair of the..., here it is just the group
- Done, added member of the.
#Synthetic viruses / bioweapons: Røttingen said that while it was unlikely that a future Disease X would originate from a bio-weapon, however, he cautioned by saying, "... - confusing
- Done, I have changed to Røttingen said it was unlikely that a future Disease X would originate from a synthetic virus or bio-weapon, however, he noted the seriousness of such an event, saying,?

Discussion

I have placed this on hold pending resolution of the issues identified above --DannyS712 (talk) 17:07, 20 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Hi DannyS712. Thank you for taking the time to do the review, and for those very helpful comments. I think I have been able to address all the comments, and have updated the article accordingly. I look forward to hearing from you. Britishfinance (talk) 18:35, 20 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  @Britishfinance: One more issue I found DannyS712 (talk) 22:10, 20 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  @DannyS712:, hopefully I have been able to fix that? thanks. Britishfinance (talk) 22:28, 20 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  @Britishfinance: I changed the comma before "however" to a period; lgtm, approving DannyS712 (talk) 22:32, 20 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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