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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:16, 5 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Taking this on to help you get closer to having a GT in the future! --K. Peake 07:16, 5 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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  • Infobox looks good!
  • The opening sentence should mention the song being from his debut mixtape, Meet the Woo (2019)
  • "alongside producer 808Melo." → "alongside the sole producer 808Melo."
  • Remove the initial release sentence since the exact date is not notable
  • "The song was released as the second single from the album" → "It was released as the second single from the mixtape"
  • "It also appeared as a bonus track" → "The song also appeared as a bonus track" with the wikilink per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • "second mixtape Meet the Woo 2 and posthumous debut studio album" → "second mixtape, Meet the Woo 2, and posthumous debut studio album,"
  • Mention that it was released on the above in February and June 2020, respectively
  • "A remix of "Dior" featuring" → "A remix of the song that features"
  • "of Meet the Woo 2 on" → "of the mixtape on" since it is the last mixtape to be mentioned here
 Not done It will confuse the reader which mixtape the remix was on.
  • "with girls and buying" → "with girls and getting" because part of it only mentions him "receiving" the clothes
  • ""Dior" became his" → "the song became his"
  • "in the US and number 33 in the UK." → "in the United States and number 33 in the United Kingdom."
  • "where it peaked at" → "where it reached" to avoid repetitive wording
  • "in the United States by" → "in the US by" per MOS:US
  • Remove "for the song" since accompanying music video indicates that
  • "and a group of men and women dancing in a parking lot and hanging out in a" → "with a group of men and women dancing in a parking lot and a"
  • The live performance should be the sentence after music video
  • Target VevoDSCVR to Vevo
  • "It has received a" → "The song has received a" and this should be the sentence after reception in the second para

Background and release

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  • Wikilink 808Melo
  • "knew that the song would" → "instantly knew the song would"
  • "He first thought it was an interesting track," → "He initially thought the song was interesting,"
  • "listened to the song and had" → "listened and had"
  • Target hook to Hook (music)
  • "next single off of his debut mixtape." → "next single from Meet the Woo." with the target, as we know that is the debut mixtape
  • "decided to have Pop Smoke" → "decided to have him"
  • Remove wikilink on Meet the Woo
  • Remove wikilink on Meet the Woo 2
  • Remove wikilink on Shoot for the Stars, Aim for the Moon
  • [7][8][9][10][11] is too many refs at the end of the sentence; move a number of them to their appropriate areas

Music and lyrics

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  • "stated that the song "throws" → "stated that the song sees Pop Smoke "throwing"
  • "the song had" → "the song has"
  • "Pop Smoke's voice felt" → "Pop Smoke's voice feels"
  • "commented that Pop Smoke operated" → "commented that the rapper operates"
  • Wikilink FaceTime
  • Target Pitchfork to Pitchfork (website)
  • "wrote that "Dior" had a" → "wrote that "Dior" has a"
  • "of flirting with girls and" → "of flirting and" since that is what the source actually says
  • Wikilink Dior

Critical reception

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  • Retitle to Reception, giving a separate para at the end for the award to split from reviews
  • "felt the song had a" → "felt the song has a"
  • "with Sarah Osei of Highsnobiety calling" → "while Sarah Osei of Highsnobiety called"
  • "music critic Michael Saponara who labeled" → "music critic Michael Saponara, who labeled" with the target
  • "and said it was an "instant" → "and an "instant"
  • "that it embodied" → "that it embodies"
  • "described it as a" → "described "Dior" as a"
  • Wikilink Big Apple
  • "thought that the song was" → "thought that the song is"

Commercial performance

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  • "It made it Pop Smoke's" → "It became Pop Smoke's"
  • "The song then rose" → "The former then rose"
  • "number 22 on the chart." → "number 22 on the Hot 100."
  • Remove usage of US before Rhythmic since you don't need it twice in one sentence
  • "after selling 1,000,000 units, making it Pop Smoke's first song to go platinum" → "for pushing 1,000,000 certified units, making it Pop Smoke's first song to achieve the certification"
  • "of over 2,000,000 units." → "of 2,000,000 units in the US."
  • "The song was certified silver" → "The song was later certified silver"
  • "on the ARIA Chart" → "on the ARIA Singles Chart" with the target

Music Video

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  • Remove capitalization of video
  • "on September 3, 2019" → "on September 3, 2019,"
  • The Twitter teaser is not sourced
  • [52] should be solely at the end of the sentence
  • The cameo part is not sourced
  • Target to Canarsie to Canarsie, Brooklyn
  • A lot of the following sentences are not backed up by [52] and [54]
  • "and cuts to black." → "before cutting to black."
  • Remove wikilink on Meet the Woo and italicise the title
  • Remove the YouTube views sentence, as that is unsourced
  • "A secondary video shot by GoddyGoddy (director of "Welcome to the Party")" → "A secondary video, shot by GoddyGoddy (director of "Welcome to the Party"),"
  • Target NSFW to Not safe for work
  • Wikilink YouTube
  • Remove wikilink on Dior
  • Target Manhattan to Manhattan, New York

Remixes and other versions

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  • Move this to being the section directly after In popular culture
  • "of "Dior" including" → "of "Dior", including"
  • Only the Lil Wayne and Jose Guapo freestyle are backed up
  • Only the Kwesi Arthur, Skeng and Perm, and Skillibeng remixes are backed up
  • "cover "Billie Jin (Dior Remix)"," → "cover, titled "Billie Jin (Dior Remix)","
  • The number one position on Spotify's chart is not backed up
  • "the single had attracted the attention of UMG/Virgin UK," → "the remix had attracted the attention of UMG/Virgin UK," with the targets
  • "was included in" → "was included on"
  • Remove wikilink on Meet the Woo 2 and italicise the title
  • The second sentence is unsourced
  • "were deemed as a fitting addition to the originals'" → "are a fitting addition to the original's"
  • [66] should be at the end of the above sentence as well
  • "third-best song of 2020 by" → "third-best song of 2020 up to July by"

Live performances

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Legacy

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  • This should be part of the below section instead as the second para, since popular culture is largely the same as legacy in this context
  • "of Canarsie, Brooklyn in" → "of Canarsie in" since you have already introduced where it is
  • [14] should be cited instead of [21] for the BLM part, as that is the accurate Variety ref
  • Target police brutality and racism to their US articles
  • Wikilink George Floyd and solely target "protests" to the page about them
  • "is "juxtaposed" against" → "was "juxtaposed" against" since the events have been and gone
  • "Alphonse Pierre of Pitchfork mentioned that the song didn't" → "Pierre mentioned that the song does not" since the songs still exist
  • "remarked it had" → "remarked the song had"
  • GQ should be italicised
  • Move the Grammy information to the Reception section
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  • The 500k videos part is not sourced, plus change to 500,000 for numerical consistency
  • The baritone growl part is not sourced
  • "In the 2020 BET Hip Hop Awards," → "In the 2020 BET Hip Hop Awards," with the wikilink
  • 808 Melo → 808Melo, with no wikilink

Personnel

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  • Retitle to Credits and personnel
  • Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between credits and personnel

Charts

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Weekly charts

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Year-end charts

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  • See MOS:TABLECAPTION

Certifications

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  • See MOS:TABLECAPTION
  • Italy certification should be in-between France and New Zealand

References

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  • Copyvio score looks pretty good at 23.7%
  • Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
  • Target Pitchfork to Pitchfork (website) on ref 7
  • Ref 21 should cite this URL instead and target Pitchfork to Pitchfork (website)
  • Target Billboard to Billboard (magazine) on refs 40, 103, 107 and 108
  • Are you sure ref 53 is a reliable source, as Vimeo's reliability is not verified and the author is not a reputable one?
  • Refs 55 and 56 are duplicates of the above one
  • Cite Okayafrica as publisher instead for ref 59 and target to OkayAfrica
  • Cite GRM Daily as publisher instead for ref 60
  • Cite Yahoo! as publisher instead for ref 63
  • Cite The Ringer as publisher instead for ref 67
  • Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 69
  • Cite the URL that leads directly to Pop Smoke's Global 200 chart history for ref 91
  • Cite hitparade.ch as publisher instead for ref 105

Final comments and verdict

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Kyle Peake sorry about the delay. It was very hard trying to edit with my parents around... And sorry for the original research. A newbie editor added all those unreliable sources and redundant info. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 04:31, 8 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
The Ultimate Boss It is fine about the delay and the OR, you missed a few things sadly which I have pointed out above. --K. Peake 06:08, 8 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Kyle Peake, Done. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 07:00, 8 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
The Ultimate Boss You missed the opening sentence fix and moving the Variety ref like I said. --K. Peake 07:46, 8 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
✓ Pass since it is only two changes so I implemented them which is acceptable in the context of the user indicating at a lack of interest in editing this site. --K. Peake 07:57, 9 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
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