Talk:Digital Personal Data Protection Act, 2023/GA1

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Reviewer: David Eppstein (talk · contribs) 08:04, 8 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

This was not ready for a Good Article nomination.

The background, overview, rights and provisions, and exemptions sections are all bulleted outlines rather than actual text (WP:GACR 1a)
The rights and provisions section is entirely unsourced, the exemptions section has only a single primary source (inadequate for any analysis), the non-applicability to offline personal data section is entirely unsourced, the exemptions to government section has an unsourced paragraph, and the Obligation with Convention on the Rights of the Child section has an unsourced sentence. It is not clear that thelogicalindian is a reliable source. (WP:GACR 2b)
It is not obvious what the Data Protection Board of India section has to do with the topic of the article (WP:GACR 3b)
There seems to have been significant recent disagreement in the edit history of the article over how much opinion to include (WP:GACR 4)
Earwig finds large amounts of text directly copied from the bill and not marked as a direct quote (WP:GACR 2d). This also marks a failure to evaluate and describe the bill (GACR 3a); copying the text of the bill does not serve that purpose. If people want to look up the text they can do that; that is not what a Wikipedia article on a bill should be for.

As such, I think it is a quick fail (WP:GAFAIL). —David Eppstein (talk) 08:04, 8 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I think I fixed the second, third and fifth concerns that were raised. Could you please have a look at the article now and if possible, can help in improving this article to be a good one? Thewikizoomer (talk) 09:31, 8 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Regarding the first point, that's the background of the bill, right from the Supreme Court's judgement to the creation of data protection framework and the activities that took place till the passage of Act. Could you be more specific on what can be improved in background as it has all the events that took place including the withdrawn PDP bill, 2019. Thewikizoomer (talk) 09:33, 8 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The Data Protection Board of India was established as per the provisions in this Act, hence mentioned. Now I have improved it. Thewikizoomer (talk) 09:35, 8 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The rights and provisions; exemptions part appear self-explanatory, don't they?

If not, could you please suggest on its improvement? Thewikizoomer (talk) 09:38, 8 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]