Talk:Different Colors/GA1
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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 09:51, 20 July 2020 (UTC)
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For review beginning later today, though may take over a day --Kyle Peake (talk) 09:51, 20 July 2020 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
[edit]- Do not use hlist; replace with bullet points
- Target pop to Pop music
- "song, "Different Colors" is lyrically" → "song, it is lyrically"
- "released to alternative radio stations" → "released to US alternative radio stations"
- Move this sentence to being the second of this para instead
- Target music critics to Music journalism
- "with many of them commenting on its chorus" → "with many of them praising its chorus" with the appropriate target
- "top ten hit on the" → "top ten track on the"
- "for the song, featuring footage of the group touring with colorful visuals, was released on June 11, 2015." → "for the song was released on June 11, 2015, featuring footage of the band touring with colorful visuals."
- "has been performed live a number of times by the band, including at award shows like the" → "was performed live by Walk the Moon at award shows, including the"
- "It was included in the setlist of" → "It was included on the setlist for"
- "was used in campaigns for" → "was used in campaigns of"
Done ThedancingMOONpolice (talk) 06:42, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
Background and composition
[edit]- "of "Different Colors", which has" → "of "Different Colors", featuring" on the audio sample main text
- Wikilink pre-chorus to itself per MOS:LINK2SECT
- The first sentence in prose belongs in the Release and reception section instead and should mentioned that it was released as the opening track; rewrite to something concise on those lines
- "It was written by all four members of the band and was recorded" → ""Different Colours" was written by all four members of Walk the Moon, while recorded"
- Target mixed to Audio mixing (recorded music)
- Target Mastering to Mastering (audio)
- Wikilink Sterling Sound to itself
- [3][5][6] should all be solely at the end of the sentence in this order since it is only three refs
- "It is composed of lots of ebullient synths and consists of" → "The song is composed of numerous ebullient synths, and features" with the target
- Wikilink pre-chorus to itself
- "to "create a weird," → "because he wanted to "create a weird," for specifying since this reads confusingly with the explanation sentence next
- "and are meant to support the" → "and are intended to show support for the"
- "It was also created to help" → "It was also used to help"
- "stated that the song is addressed to" → "stated that the song addresses"
- "by saying "it shows a" → "by saying that "it shows a"
- "a chance for [the band] to" → "a chance for [Walk the Moon] to"
- "talking about the inspiration for the track," → "talking about the inspiration for "Different Colors","
- "how he was frustrated that news segments" → "being frustrated that news segments"
- "and wanted "to write" → "and that the band "to write"
Done ThedancingMOONpolice (talk) 06:42, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
Release and reception
[edit]- "pre-orders of Talking Is Hard on" → "pre-orders of Talking Is Hard via"
- "The song was also made available for steaming" → "Simultaneously, the song was made available for streaming"
- "It impacted alternative radio stations" → "It impacted US alternative radio stations"
- Remove wikilink on extended play
- "on December 4, 2015,[16] which" → "on December 4 of that year, which" moving [16] to the end of the sentence
- "of "Different Colors" done by Lost Kings and The Griswolds," → "of "Different Colors", done by Lost Kings and the Griswolds, respectively." per MOS:THEMUSIC
- "a cover of" → "The EP also features a cover of" as this should now be a new sentence
- "by The Isley Brothers, and" → "by the Isley Brothers, and"
- "were donated to the" → "were set to be donated to the"
- "received mostly positive reviews from music critics." → "was met with mostly positive reviews from music critics." with the target
- "indie rock" in his review of Talking Is Hard." → "indie rock"." since that is off topic
- "and that it "is bound to" → "and it "is bound to"
- Target Vulture to Vulture.com
- "about the song, writing that the track" → "towards the song, writing that it"
- "but mentioned that its chorus "is probably" → "but called the chorus "probably"
- "The reviewer noted that the" → "The staff of the publication noted that the"
- Should the list be in speech marks?
- I see music lists being in speech marks like ones on this article.
Done all other fixes. ThedancingMOONpolice (talk) 06:42, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
Commercial performance
[edit]- "In the United States, "Different Colors" debuted at number 36 on Billboard's" → ""Different Colors" debuted at number 36 on the US Billboard"
- Target Alternative Songs to Alternative Airplay
- "third top ten hit on the chart." → "third top ten hit on the Alternative Songs chart."
- "It spent a total of 20 weeks" → "The song spent a total of 20 weeks"
- "on the Alternative Songs 2015 year-end chart." → "on the US Alternative Songs year-end chart for 2015."
- Wikilink Rock Airplay to itself
- "on the week ending October 30, 2015," → "for the issue date of October 30, 2015,"
- "On the Hot Rock Songs chart," → "On the US Hot Rock Songs chart,"
- "and also logged 20 weeks there." → "and also logged 20 weeks on the chart."
- "On the week ending December 25, 2015," → "For the issue dated December 25, 2015,"
- Wikilink Hot Singles Sales to itself
- "at number three following the release" → "at number three, following the release"
- Wikilink Canada Rock to itself
Done ThedancingMOONpolice (talk) 06:49, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
Music video
[edit]- Retitle to Promotional videos, since not only is there more than one but a lyric video is not the same as a music video
- "one of the landmarks in Cincinnati featured" → "one of Cincinnati's landmarks featured" on the img main text
- Wikilink lyric video to itself; do this in prose too
- "was filmed in the band's" → "was filmed in Walk the Moon's"
- "This is Walk the Moon's" → "The visual stood as the band's"
- "The official music video, featuring" → "An accompanying music video, featuring"
- "Directed by Nathan Crooker and Patrick Nichols," → "It was directed by Nathan Crooker and Patrick Nichols."
- "the video visually features many bright colors with" → "The video visually includes the bright colors of"
- "which had been a thing picked up" → "which was picked up"
- "by saying: "We've heard" → "saying: "We've heard"
- "Speaking about the creation of the video," → "Referencing the creation of the music video,"
- "the band tweeted that they" → "Walk the Moon tweeted that they" with the wikilink
- "of [the group's] favorite" → "of [the band's] favorite"
Done ThedancingMOONpolice (talk) 06:56, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
Live performances
[edit]- Merge this with the next section since each is only one para and retitle to Live performances and use in other media
- "on October 16, 2013." → "on October 16, 2013 by Walk the Moon."
- "in the setlist of Walk the Moon's" → "on the setlist of their"
- "The band played" → "That same year, the band played"
- "It was performed live" → "It was performed live by them"
- "The band performed" → "Walk the Moon performed"
- "by the group on" → "by the band for"
- "on September 25, 2015." → "on September 25 of that year."
- "It was also performed at the" → "They also performed it at the"
- "on November 7, 2015." → "on November 7 of that year."
- "It was performed at" → "It was performed by them at"
Done ThedancingMOONpolice (talk) 07:12, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
Use in other media
[edit]- I did suggest merging, but this should be a separate para once you have merged the sections
- Add release year of the film in (brackets)
- Target to Paper Towns should be on "of the same name"
- "titled "Subway Serenade" for" are you sure it shouldn't be "entitled Subway Serenade for"
- The CNET article had the title of the video in quotes, which is why I used them.
- "dancing and rhythmically" → "dancing, while rhythmically"
- "While AT&T initially wanted" → "Though AT&T initially wanted"
Done all other fixes. ThedancingMOONpolice (talk) 07:12, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
Track listing
[edit]- Retitle to Track listings since there is more than one
Done ThedancingMOONpolice (talk) 07:23, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
Credits and personnel
[edit]- Remove wikilink on California
- Use
{{spaced ndash}}
so there is the right space between credits and personnel - Target recording to Audio engineer
- Target mixing to Audio mixing (recorded music)
- Target mastering to Mastering (audio)
Done ThedancingMOONpolice (talk) 07:23, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
Charts
[edit]Weekly charts
[edit]- Wikilink Hot Singles Sales to itself
Done ThedancingMOONpolice (talk) 07:23, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
Year-end charts
[edit]- Annual chart performance for "Different Colors" → 2015 year-end chart performance for "Different Colors"
Done ThedancingMOONpolice (talk) 07:23, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
Release history
[edit]- Label → Label(s)
- Wasn't the initial release also streaming?
- Remove target on EP
Done ThedancingMOONpolice (talk) 07:23, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
References
[edit]- Archive all of these by using the tool
- Copyvio score looks fine at 36.3%
- Target Vulture to Vulture.com on ref 2
- Are you sure ref 7 is reliable since that's a tabloid?
- Omitted the first two sentences of the second Background and composition paragraph for now.
- Remove or replace ref 8 since that is a college newspaper so is not reliable
- WP:OVERLINK of RCA Records on ref 13
- Retitle ref 14 to Alternative Radio Future Releases
- Remove Apple Music from the title of ref 15
- Cite numerous countries for ref 16 to verify that the release was indeed various
- Add the language template for ref 18
- Target Billboard to Billboard (magazine) on ref 22
- Remove target on Billboard for refs 23 and 27
- MOS:QWQ issues with ref 33
- MOS:CAPS issues with ref 38
- Remove Google Play from the title of ref 44
Done Except bullet 1.
- ThedancingMOONpolice It appears as if you have totally forgotten about this section after responding to the other suggestions. --K. Peake 05:10, 27 July 2020 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake Actually I haven't; I've done all the fixes except the archiving tool, I submitted a job from this link (it's job 6255): https://iabot.toolforge.org/index.php Is there more you have to do after that? Thanks. ThedancingMOONpolice (talk) 07:53, 27 July 2020 (UTC)
External links
[edit]- Good
Final comments and verdict
[edit]- Changed some of my comments about the lead, but I am now ready to put this article On hold until the issues are fixed. --Kyle Peake (talk) 09:59, 21 July 2020 (UTC)
- ThedancingMOONpolice I was unaware you had completed the fixes since you did not mark the section as done initially, sorry, I will now ✓ Pass the article after using the Fix dead links tool for you. --K. Peake 08:14, 27 July 2020 (UTC)