Talk:Diego Valeri/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 23:08, 2 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)}

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

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He is considered as one of the greatest players of all time in Major League Soccer and Portland Timbers history^{[according to whom?]} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:31, 4 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Done Changed to "Valeri is regarded by Major League Soccer as one of their greatest players of all time and in Portland Timbers history." and with a citation included. --ArsenalFan700 (talk) 21:17, 16 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

then presented - later presentedBest Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:31, 4 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Done made the switch. --ArsenalFan700 (talk) 21:17, 16 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

He was with his first team for ten years, but the lede barely mentions his time there. Seems to be obsessed with his time at Portland. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:31, 4 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Not marking this as "done". Added what I could but there isn't too much available on his time at Lanus. I sort of look at this like with Thierry Henry, where we have a bit about his time with Monaco, a club he played over 100 matches for, before a line about Juventus. Let me know what you think? --ArsenalFan700 (talk) 21:17, 16 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Is it not the 2015 MLS Cup rather than "MLS Cup 2015"? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:31, 4 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Sure, but officially it is known as MLS Cup 2015. --ArsenalFan700 (talk) 21:17, 16 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

then led - this suggests he was the captain? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:31, 4 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Changed it to captained, and added that to the Timbers section below, with citation. --ArsenalFan700 (talk) 21:37, 16 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Valeri then led the Timbers to the final of the MLS is Back Tournament in 2020, defeating Orlando City. - and then defeated Orlando in the final or similar. Currently reads like they defeated Orlando on route to the final. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:31, 4 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Added the final bit. --ArsenalFan700 (talk) 21:37, 16 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Valeri has been a prolific goalscorer for the Portland Timbers - is a goal every three games really "prolific"? Who says that? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:31, 4 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Removed prolific and changed the sentence around. --ArsenalFan700 (talk) 21:37, 16 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

His international appearances could probably be expanded here. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:31, 4 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Eh, kind of hard to do. He made a start in a friendly, not much else to add that is noteworthy besides that he made his debut. Suggestions? --ArsenalFan700 (talk) 21:37, 16 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

General

of Lanús, a suburb of Buenos Aires[2] on 1 May 1986, - weird placement of ref. Which one covers his birthdate? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:45, 4 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
158 matches and 25 goals are covered in four sentences. Needs a bit of an expansion. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:45, 4 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Any explanation why the team would loan out their captain? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:45, 4 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
His second loan period just covers his debut, and nothing more. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:45, 4 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
The loan to Timbers can be merged into the main section Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:45, 4 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
The next season, on 19 July 2014 - is the date important? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:45, 4 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Is his quote (in the box) really necessary? It doesn't seem to add much. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:45, 4 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Link for ACL Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:45, 4 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Valeri made his first appearance on 2 May 2015 - this wasn't his first appearance. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:45, 4 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
He opened the scoring for the club after just 27 seconds, deflecting a clearance from Columbus goalkeeper Steve Clark to give the Timbers the very early lead. - we don't need to say "very early lead" we have the time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:45, 4 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
declining his contract option, Valeri signed another contract extension with the Portland Timbers - what does this mean? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:45, 4 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Valeri would go on to make just two more appearances - he is an active player though, surely he could get more? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:45, 4 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Style of play seems to be completely based on his Timbers time, surely he must have gotten a reputation before playing at Porto? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:45, 4 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Review meta comments

I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 23:08, 2 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Any update on this one ArsenalFan700? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:12, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hi! I am sorry about that. This review began right after I arrived in Michigan for vacation. I am only able to do a couple small things on wikipedia for the time being. I will start looking at this tonight but I will probably need a little under a week more to get through all of these items properly. Let me know if that works and I will begin as soon as I can. Really do appreciate you starting this though. Cheers. --ArsenalFan700 (talk) 16:36, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

No problem. Keep in contact. I'm happy to keep this open for an additional 7 days. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:19, 13 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hi ArsenalFan700 - any update on the remainder? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 11:28, 22 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Actually booked in time on my schedule to hit at the rest :D Sorry for the pace here. --ArsenalFan700 (talk) 13:03, 22 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

, enough time has passed. Failing with regret. Please open a new GAN to proceed. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:59, 27 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]