Talk:Diadumenian/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gog the Mild (talk · contribs) 15:40, 17 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

Further information: WP:WIAGA

Well-written:

(a) the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct; and

(b) it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.^[1]

Verifiable with no original research:

(a) it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline;

(b) reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose);^[2]

(c) it contains no original research; and

(d) it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.

Broad in its coverage:

(a) it addresses the main aspects of the topic;^[3] and

(b) it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).

Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.

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Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:

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(a) media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content; and

(b) media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.^[6]

Review

Well-written:

Criteria	Notes	Result
(a) (prose)	The reviewer has no notes here.	Pass
(b) (MoS)	The reviewer has no notes here.	Pass

Verifiable with no original research:

Criteria	Notes	Result
(a) (references)	The article is completely sourced and the sources meet the standards of WP:RS.	Pass
(b) (citations to reliable sources)	The article is completely sourced.	Pass
(c) (original research)	There is no evidence of OR.	Pass
(d) (copyvio and plagiarism)	Earwig shows 1% confidence.	Pass

Broad in its coverage:

Criteria	Notes	Result
(a) (major aspects)	The reviewer has no notes here.	Pass
(b) (focused)	The article does not stray from the topic.	Pass

Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.

Notes	Result
There is no evidence of bias and the article is presented with a NPOV	Pass

Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.

Notes	Result
Few changes since it was nominated. One piece of vandalism was rapidly reverted.	Pass

Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:

Criteria	Notes	Result
(a) (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales)	One, clear and relevant, image, appropriately tagged.	Pass
(b) (appropriate use with suitable captions)		Pass

Result

Result	Notes
Pass	A short but solid article. A useful addition to the ranks of Good Articles. Gog the Mild (talk) 09:46, 15 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Discussion

@Iazyges: More to follow, but to get you started: Images

Strictly, a portrait or image on a coin is not a "bust", which applies to sculpture.
Done

Prose and coverage.

"Extant artifacts of his coinage as augustus are extremely limited". This sounds contrived, and is arguably ungrammatical. "Extant" is then used a second time in the same sentence. Any chance of rephrasing it?
Done
Who is Curtis Clay?
Done
Under Numanistics you use "bust" again. See above.
Done
Why are Aureus and Half-Aureus capitalised?
Done
"Diadumenian was born on 14 September 208, named Marcus Opellius Diadumenianus, to Macrinus, the Praetorian Prefect and future emperor, and his possibly fictitious wife Nonia Celsa. Diadumenian was elevated to caesar in April 217, at Zeugma, while his guard was escorting him from Antioch to Mesopotamia, to join his father." To my mind there is a discontinuity between these two sentences. Consider inserting a sentence stating that Macrinus had become emperor.
Done
"He was also given the name Antoninus, in honor of the Antonine dynasty, at this time. Elagabalus revolted at Emesa on 16 May 218, after which Macrinus led his legions to the praetorian fort at Apamea." To my mind there is a discontinuity between these two sentences. Consider inserting a sentence stating who Elagabalus was, and, perhaps, why he revolted.
Done
Several links in the lead are repeated in the main text.
Per MOS:DL, it is allowed for it to be linked in the lead and then the first usage in the body. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 00:48, 15 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Who is Artabanus V?
Done
"After Macrinus was defeated by Elagabalus on 8 June 218, at the Battle of Antioch, Macrinus fled north to the Bosporus, and entrusted Diadumenian to loyal servants, instructing them to take him into the Parthian Empire, to the court of Artabanus V, to ensure his safety. Diadumenian was captured en route in Zeugma, and executed in late June" An overlong sentence. Gog the Mild (talk) 21:30, 17 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Done

@Gog the Mild: I believe I have addressed all of your concerns. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 00:48, 15 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Iazyges: You have indeed. Good work. Gog the Mild (talk) 09:46, 15 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Additional notes

^ Compliance with other aspects of the Manual of Style, or the Manual of Style mainpage or subpages of the guides listed, is not required for good articles.
^ Either parenthetical references or footnotes can be used for in-line citations, but not both in the same article.
^ This requirement is significantly weaker than the "comprehensiveness" required of featured articles; it allows shorter articles, articles that do not cover every major fact or detail, and overviews of large topics.
^ Vandalism reversions, proposals to split or merge content, good faith improvements to the page (such as copy editing), and changes based on reviewers' suggestions do not apply. Nominations for articles that are unstable because of unconstructive editing should be placed on hold.
^ Other media, such as video and sound clips, are also covered by this criterion.
^ The presence of images is not, in itself, a requirement. However, if images (or other media) with acceptable copyright status are appropriate and readily available, then some such images should be provided.

[1] Compliance with other aspects of the Manual of Style, or the Manual of Style mainpage or subpages of the guides listed, is not required for good articles.

[2] Either parenthetical references or footnotes can be used for in-line citations, but not both in the same article.

[3] This requirement is significantly weaker than the "comprehensiveness" required of featured articles; it allows shorter articles, articles that do not cover every major fact or detail, and overviews of large topics.

[4] Vandalism reversions, proposals to split or merge content, good faith improvements to the page (such as copy editing), and changes based on reviewers' suggestions do not apply. Nominations for articles that are unstable because of unconstructive editing should be placed on hold.

[5] Other media, such as video and sound clips, are also covered by this criterion.

[6] The presence of images is not, in itself, a requirement. However, if images (or other media) with acceptable copyright status are appropriate and readily available, then some such images should be provided.

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