Talk:Dia Bridgehampton/GA1

GA Review

Unsuccessful. Z1720 (talk) 15:19, 14 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Reviewer: Z1720 (talk · contribs) 14:51, 6 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I will be reviewing this shortly. Z1720 (talk) 14:51, 6 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Comments on prose:

"The overall renovation was sympathetic" What does this mean? I think this needs to be explained better or a different word used.
"At the opening of the museum the New York Times stated that an exhibit of fire department memorabilia," The article doesn't need to say who reported about future exhibits. Instead, it can just state that these were planned at the opening.
Merge the last two paragraphs of "Dia and Dan Flavin"
"The Dan Flavin Art Institute, within Dia Bridgehampton, consists of nine works in fluorescent light, as well as one drawing, all by Dan Flavin and all on permanent display." The phrasing is awkward, especially with all the commas. Try rephrasing or splitting it up.
"Dia expresses, in the pamphlet describing the institute," Delete "pamphlet describing the institute" as it is not needed.
"In a New York Times article about the opening of the museum, it is reported the plans for this" The reader does not need to know where it was reported.
The "Temporary exhibitions" section should be broken up with level 3 headings.

Image review:

Images are properly licenced
Captions are fine

Source review:

No major issues with sources.
Suggest archiving the sources using IA Bot
No issues with earwig (high percentage is because of direct quotes)
Source check not completed yet.

When the above are addressed, I'll do another read-through and verify the sources. I made edits along the way, so feel free to revert anything that isn't helpful. I'll place this on hold in the meantime. Z1720 (talk) 15:46, 6 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Due to a lack of response, I'll close this as unsuccessful. This can be renominated when the above are addressed. Z1720 (talk) 15:19, 14 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.