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April 10, 2010	Good article nominee	Listed

A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on March 11, 2010.

The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that the Hindu widow goddess Dhumavati (pictured) is offered liquor, meat, cigarettes and bhang, an intoxicating hashish drink?

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GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Dhumavati/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: –– Jezhotwells (talk) 12:20, 10 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I shall be reviewing this article against the Good Article criteria, following its nomination for Good Article status.

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GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS):
Dhumavati (Sanskrit: धूमावती, Dhūmāvatī, literally "the smoky one") is one of the Mahavidyas, ten Tantric goddesses and a fearsome aspect of Devi, the Hindu Divine Mother. This is rather clumsy, how about "Dhumavati (Sanskrit: धूमावती, Dhūmāvatī, literally "the smoky one") is one of the ten Mahavidyas (Tantric goddesses) and a fearsome aspect of Devi, the Hindu Divine Mother." Done

... often depicted astride a horseless chariot ... "... often depicted astride a horseless chariot ..." "on" is better than "astride" here. Done

Dhumavati is said to manifest at the time of cosmic dissolution and "the Void" that exists before creation and after dissolution A bit clumsy "at the time of cosmic dissolution and "the Void"" Can you rephrase this, the conjunction of "cosmic dissolution" and "the Void" is confusing.
OK, I read Frawley and found the quote by Ganapati Muni which explains this, so added that to the origin section. Also changed "at the time of cosmic dissolution and "the Void" that exists " to at the time of cosmic dissolution and is "the Void" that exists " This makes it clear.

Looking through the lead and the rest of the article I find that nearly every sentence is badly written, with poor grammar and a lack of clarity. Please get someone else to copy-edit this. You can find tips for the kind of style to approach at User:Tony1/How to improve your writing and the subpages there.

~~I have made some copy-edits in the lead but frankly it is not the job of the reviewer to completely rewrite an article in plain, clear English. That should be done before the article is nominated.~~

It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
All online references check out. The article is adequately referenced to reliable sources
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
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It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
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Pass/Fail:
This is an interesting article, but the prose is very poor and not of Good Article standard: see Good article criterion 1. As mentioned above copy-editing should be done before nominating articles at WP:GAN. I shall place this on hold for seven days. If substantial progress is not made in that time, I will fail it. But you can renominate when it is ready. As the review queue is currently quite short, I won't take l;ong to get a new review. –– Jezhotwells (talk) 13:28, 10 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]
OK, I think that this is in good shape now, so I am happy to list this as a Good Article. –– Jezhotwells (talk) 18:09, 10 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Copy-editing questions

1. You mention Jyestha as a possible pre-cursor goddess in the Origins section. What does she symbolize? NielsenGW (talk) 14:16, 10 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

She is another goddess closely related to inauspiciousness in general. Similarities between Jyestha and Dhumavati are listed ahead. --Redtigerxyz ^Talk 14:24, 10 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Done I've gone through the article and cleaned up as much as possible. NielsenGW (talk) 15:29, 10 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

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I thought that she is a good and also auspicious goddess why your website is representing her as witch.she is the goddess which helps us to fight with our bad qualities. 2404:7C80:64:4A5A:2F53:E4EE:C8EE:1BD7 (talk) 11:54, 28 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]