Talk:Des van Jaarsveldt/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:11, 1 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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I would link Rhodesia as it's not all that well known.
Could link List of South Africa national rugby union team captains.
"scoring all of Rhodesia's points" in a X-Y victory/defeat?
Link wing and flank.
And "tries".
And "for the South African national team" in the main body.
"because ... because" bit clunky.
"captained the Springboks in " link that first time, not here.
Test history table need not be sortable and could use row and col scopes per MOS:DTT.
Do our readers all know who the Springboks and All Blacks are?
Ref 1 could use an en-dash.
"Extra reading" Further, not Extra.
Ref 6 year range needs en-dash.
Suc box, "Rugby Union Captain" shouldn't that be Rugby union captain, and Springbok Captain -> South African rugby union captain? And were is Dryburgh referenced?
Errors in infobox showing (deprecated parameters), could use tidying.

Sorry, I've been busy. I'll withdraw this. The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 14:59, 12 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

No thank you. I'm withdrawing it completely please. The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 15:41, 12 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Well, you can't technically stop me, and since my efforts were ignored and wasted, I might just go ahead without your "blessing". The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 15:48, 12 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I have sorted the issues you raised. The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 19:12, 12 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

You're welcome, don't mention it. I'll take a look when I do my next GAN sweep. Cheers! The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 19:14, 12 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]