Talk:Dennis Gorski/GA1
GA Review
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Reviewer: Wizardman 18:24, 17 November 2009 (UTC)
This is a good article overall, though I do have a few issues:
- "Gorski served thirteen months during the Vietnam War under the command of Col. Robert Reilly." the time spent is mentioneda few times, making it redundant. Only the first mention needed.
- "He was succeeded as the 143rd district representative in the New York State Assembly by Paul Tokasz in a March 1988 special election." Who was, Crangle or Gorski? Can't tell.
- Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 20:06, 17 November 2009 (UTC)
- Any particular reason why the .png version of the FISU flag is used rather than the .svg?
- Nope. Swapped.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 20:08, 17 November 2009 (UTC)
- "...making Erie County one of the early counties to confirm the requirement of that most supermarket products have a price tags." I get what it's saying but the last part's worded oddly.
- Removed stray preposition.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 20:09, 17 November 2009 (UTC)
- "Gorski handed Griffin the first general election defeat of his political career when the Mayor contested Gorski as the Republican Party and New York State Right to Life Party nominee." So Griffin ran in the democratic primary, then as a republican? That's how is sounds and I'm pretty sure that's wrong.
- Oddly that is how Buffalo politics work. Everyone is a democrat even the republicans.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 20:11, 17 November 2009 (UTC)
- Images need WP:ALT text, but if you want to wait for FAC to bother with that then that's fine, this can be skipped.
- "In 1992, he ran against Republican Jack Quinn and Mary Refermat for Henry Nowak's seat in the United States House of Representatives to serve in the 103rd United States Congress." Do you mean Republicans, or was Refermat an independent? Furthermore, it never mentions that he lost that race in the body (does in the lead though)
- She was a third party of some sort.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 20:13, 17 November 2009 (UTC)
- This is more for in between GA and FA, but work on the flow on the political career section; it feels like it jumps from fact to fact without really tying them together.
- Maybe the WP:MILHIST A-class reviewers can give me specific pointers if it passes here.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 20:12, 17 November 2009 (UTC)
I'll put the article on hold and pass upon completion, ideally in a couple days. Though I presume you know how it works by now :) Wizardman 18:24, 17 November 2009 (UTC)
- Everything's fixed up, so article passed. Wizardman 20:42, 17 November 2009 (UTC)