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Reviewer: Dr. Blofeld (talk · contribs) 10:00, 4 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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Successful is repeated quite a few rimes, perhaps reword one or too, especially "hugely successful ".

Early life

By 2006 Padukone had established a successful career as a model with a hugely popular print campaign. Hugely again I don't like seeing, maybe "by 2006 Padukone had established a career as a model after a highly successful print campaign?

Acting career
  • "The film was hugely publicised" -again..
  • "Om Shanti Om was a hugely popular release," ditto
  • "Love Aaj Kal proved the -" proved to be the
  • "Padukone started 2011 with the hugely hyped item " ditto. = overly hyped
  • "The pairing of Padukone with Kapoor (her ex-boyfriend) led to a huge hype surrounding the film's release" -ditto
  • Padukone's next film role was opposite Shahrukh Khan in Rohit Shetty's action comedy film Chennai Express as Meenalochini Azhagu Sundaram, -when was this?
Personal
  • "She visited the Indian jawan troops in Jammu, for an Independence Day special episode of NDTV's reality show Jai Jawaan.[108] In 2010 she took part in the opening ceremony of the third season of the Indian Premier League at the DY Patil Stadium in Navi Mumbai.[109] Three years later, she performed alongside Shahrukh Khan, Katrina Kaif, and Pitbull for the sixth edition of the Indian Premier League.[110] In early 2013 she performed at the 2013 Zee Cine awards[111] and later that year performed in Macao for the 14th IIFA Awards.[11" A lot of repetition of "she", replace some with Padukone.
Media
  • "In 2012 it was reported that Padukone had signed on for an endorsement deal worth INR60 million (US$950,000), " -who was this deal with?
Thanks Dr. Blofeld. All the points have been addressed. :) --smarojit HD 10:09, 7 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]


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Good job.♦ Dr. Blofeld 12:31, 7 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you. :) --smarojit HD 18:35, 7 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]