Talk:Deep, Deep Trouble/GA1

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Reviewer: J Milburn (talk · contribs) 22:35, 3 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Happy to offer a review- your articles are always excellent. J Milburn (talk) 22:35, 3 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"The song was written by The Simpsons creator Matt Groening and DJ Jazzy Jeff,[2] and produced by DJ Jazzy Jeff and John Boylan."
"after "Do the Bartman".[8][9]" Worth a mention how successful this one was? On an article this short, we can afford to have a few little details
Typically, details about music videos go above charting history. I can certainly see the argument for doing it differently here.
"the Simpsons shorts that" Italics?
A quick, couple of line synopsis of the music video would be great
Sources seem completely appropriate and reliable. I'd lose the italics on the website names (the lack of page numbers on some references is annoying, but acceptable at GA level)
While I can't see a screenshot or a music sample being too useful here, as the lyrics are what is focussed upon, perhaps a sample of the lyrics? In a quotebox, perhaps?
The lead is a tiny bit choppy- could it perhaps be smoothed out for a better flow?

Not the greatest article ever, I'm sure you'll admit, but you've done very well to pull together all these sources and produce the article you have. Nice work! J Milburn (talk) 22:50, 3 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Heh, yeah this isn't one of my best creations ;-) but the sources used in the article are all that I have found, despite searching Google, Google News, Google Books, Newsbank, and Highbeam. Anyway, I've fixed your issues + made some other improvements and I think the article is much better now. As always thanks for a great review! :) Theleftorium ^(talk) 10:12, 5 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Great improvements. I'm happy to promote this one now. J Milburn (talk) 15:21, 5 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! Theleftorium ^(talk) 16:46, 5 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]