Talk:Death and state funeral of Leonid Brezhnev/GA1
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Reviewer: Arsenikk (talk) 12:05, 31 January 2011 (UTC)
- Comments
- OK: Avoid boldfacing links. If there is nothing appropriate to boldface, an article can be left with none without any problem.
- OK: Normally, numbers are spelled when smaller than ten or twelve, also for ordinal numbers.
- OK: Titles are not capitalized unless in full (i.e. "General Secretary of the Communist Party [of the Soviet Union]" should be capitalized, but just "general secretary" or "chairman" is not).
- OK: [A bit beyond the GA criteria, but] avoid starting sentences with digits, so I restructured the sentence.
- OK: Any particular government is a proper noun, and thus capitalized.
- Although fully permitted, don't feel obliged to use the 12-hour clock principal. I am uncertain about Russia, but in my experience, most of Eastern Europe uses the 24-hour clock, so such a denotation of time is preferred (just like in Norway).
- OK: 'Moscow Time' is a proper noun, thus capitalized and should be linked so people can figure out what it is.
- Explained: Any mention in the sources of the time of the announcement?
- Well, I don't know what you mean, the article both mentions date and time of the announcement. --TIAYN (talk) 15:39, 1 February 2011 (UTC)
- OK: Tweaked the first sentence of "funeral service" to avoid it sounding like the funeral was on 11 November.
- OK: Emdashes (—) are unspaced.
- OK: Relations, such as "Soviet–US relations", should use an endash (–), not a hyphen (-).
- OK: For quotations, there needs to be a inline citation right after the quote (or at least the sentence the quote is in); accumulating one at the end of the paragraph is not sufficient for quotes (although fine for pretty much all other information).
- Thanks: I am accepting the fair use rationale, as it cannot be reproduced, is of an important historical event and is vital for understanding the article.
Done I've fixed pretty much everything, but I am still a little confused as to when the funeral took place. This should be specified both in the lead and in the body. Once fixed, I'll be more than happy to pass the article. Arsenikk (talk) 12:05, 31 January 2011 (UTC)
- his funeral was on the 15th http://visualrian.com/images/item/418745 but a better source should be available somewhere :) --DeVerm (talk) 19:44, 1 February 2011 (UTC).
- The end date of the funeral needs to be stated in the body and referenced (all information in the lead needs to be in the body as well). Also, what date did the speeches and main ceremony take place. Although I understand that things happened in the course of four days, there is surely some sort of climax, which needs to be dated (and even better, a time given, if available). Also, at what time was the death announced? There is a time for the "hints", but how long afterwards was the announcement made? Are we talking minutes, or was it later in the day. The text needs to be a bit more specific. Arsenikk (talk) 10:02, 2 February 2011 (UTC)
- Was announced by Igor Kirillov at 11 a.m. Moscow Time on Soviet television, and the funeral took place on 15 November. --TIAYN (talk) 14:08, 2 February 2011 (UTC)
- Good. Congratulations with a good article. Arsenikk (talk) 14:46, 2 February 2011 (UTC)
- Was announced by Igor Kirillov at 11 a.m. Moscow Time on Soviet television, and the funeral took place on 15 November. --TIAYN (talk) 14:08, 2 February 2011 (UTC)
- The end date of the funeral needs to be stated in the body and referenced (all information in the lead needs to be in the body as well). Also, what date did the speeches and main ceremony take place. Although I understand that things happened in the course of four days, there is surely some sort of climax, which needs to be dated (and even better, a time given, if available). Also, at what time was the death announced? There is a time for the "hints", but how long afterwards was the announcement made? Are we talking minutes, or was it later in the day. The text needs to be a bit more specific. Arsenikk (talk) 10:02, 2 February 2011 (UTC)