Talk:Dean Whitehead/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: ArsenalGhanaPartey (talk · contribs) ArsenalGhanaPartey (talk) 16:39, 9 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Placing this on hold until the nominator fixes everything. Most of everything else looks good. ArsenalGhanaPartey (talk) 18:45, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Update: Improvements were made, so this will be a pass. ArsenalGhanaPartey (talk) 12:57, 11 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

"Dean Whitehead (born 12 January 1982) is an English former professional footballer and coach who now coaches at EFL League Two club Port Vale." The section that is bolded seems a bit hard to read.
- Done.--Echetus Xe 22:23, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"Whitehead joined his local non-League club Abingdon Town before he signed for Football League club Oxford United in 1999." Which division in the football league? Be more clear.
- Done.--Echetus Xe 22:23, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

"before joining the youth scheme of his local Football League club..." replace "Football League" with something like "professional".
- It has both now.--Echetus Xe 22:23, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"Towards the end of the 2001–02 season, he began playing into a central midfield position." Replace the bolded part with "playing in a central midfield role."
- Done.--Echetus Xe 22:23, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"He also scored a free kick on 1 November, to make a 3–1 comeback win over Darlington." Say something else like "He also scored a free kick on 1 November, while helping his team make a 3–1 comeback win over Darlington."
- Done.--Echetus Xe 22:23, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

"By November, he began playing in the right-wing position in an unfamiliar role." Replace that with "By November, he began playing in the right-wing position, a more unfamiliar role."
- Done.--Echetus Xe 22:23, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"In the 2007–08 season, Whitehead played in the right-back position against Tottenham Hotspur in the opening game of the season, before sustaining a cruciate knee ligament injury in a match against Wigan Athletic in August, which ruled him out for six months." Add the comma as shown here. (Between "season" and "before".)
- Done.--Echetus Xe 22:23, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"...where he started the whole game, in a 7–1 loss against Everton." Replace that with "playing every minute of a 7-1 loss against Everton."
- Done.--Echetus Xe 22:23, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"Since returning from injury, he regained his first-team place for Sunderland throughout the season." Remove the bolded part to avoid repetition.
- Done.--Echetus Xe 22:23, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

"Whitehead lost his place in the starting eleven to a resurgent Glenn Whelan, making a number of cameo appearances from the bench." Add a citation here. Also, change "resurgent" to "resurging".
- Done.--Echetus Xe 22:23, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

"He made his Middlesbrough debut, where he started the whole game, in a 2–1 loss against Leicester City in the opening game of the season." Remove the bolded part.
- Done.--Echetus Xe 22:23, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

"By the end of the 2015–16 season, Whitehead went on to make thirty–six appearances in all competitions" Add a period.
- Done.--Echetus Xe 22:23, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"Due to Hudson's absent..." Replace that with "absence".
- Done.--Echetus Xe 22:23, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"Ahead of the 2017–18 season, Huddersfield announced that Whitehead had extended his contract with the club until the end of the 2017–18 Premier League season, with manager David Wagner stating..." Add a comma. (Between "season" and "with".)
- Done.--Echetus Xe 22:23, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

"On 25 November, Whitehead and Ricketts were relieved of their duties with the club sat 23rd in League One with just 9 points from a possible 39." Replace "sat" with "sitting".
- Done.--Echetus Xe 22:23, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Looks Good.

No problem! After these improvements were made, I am now passing this. Congratulations and keep up the good work! ArsenalGhanaPartey (talk) 12:57, 11 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]